Now that my story is STARTING to move a long, I'd like more opinions! It's ultimately going to be part of a much longer story, so if the pacing seems slow, then well...

Here's a BRIEF synopsis of the overall story...

"Over the years, childhood friends Carter and Barran have grown apart, but their bitter feud turns deadly and the life of a young girl named Elora is at stake. As events unfold, a promise made between childhood friends could change the world forever..."

Check it out, and be honest!

http://www.drunkduck.com/The_Long_Hard_Road/index.php?p=148301

Thanks!