http://www.drunkduck.com/Wright_as_Rayne/

Was wanting to wait until the story started to get a bit more underway, but I figured I might as well try to spread the word early on. There isn't a lot to critique at the moment, but anything on what there is would help and in a few weeks I'll probably bump this so there's more to critique. Anyhoo, pageviews/comments/suggestion/criticism would be greatly appreciated.

I liked the charcoal effect bacgrounds but i felt the art needs work

I also really didn't like the way you had all the information displayed on that one page
it's giving too much away, and these things are meant to be shown through the comic itself

Apart from that, not much to say, there wasn't enough material for me to critique it properly