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[PLUG/CRIT] The Lapse
Marnicx at 7:14PM, Oct. 20, 2007
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The Lapse.
Five people.
With amnesia.
All on board one big-ass ship.
But who is Jean, and why are they all connected to her? Does she have anything to do with the story?
Well. I guess you'll have to read to find out.

Sorry if there are only a couple of pages, but I've been going through a terrible artist's block. I'll try to keep up, though, and visits are welcome :D
last edited on July 14, 2011 1:54PM
Priest_Revan at 8:14PM, Oct. 20, 2007
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Looks okay. You're good with faces and perspective.

I guess the most you could work on is the body itself.

...

Not sure what else to say.
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7/0

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last edited on July 14, 2011 2:48PM
Darth Mongoose at 4:56AM, Oct. 21, 2007
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You draw very good faces and hands. The faces, in particular, look really pro. The clarity of the storytelling in the comic, though, is being compromised by too many head panels. More backgrounds and shots showing full bodies and characters in relation to each other in an environment would make the storytelling aspect clearer.
In other words, try to practice the things you're less good at, like the rest of the body, particularly the torso, and the scenery, to bring the standard of how you draw them up to match how well you draw faces.
I like the premise of the comic. Good concept. Also, it's nicely drawn and crafted. Just needs some work on the things you're less confident at drawing to make it really shine.
last edited on July 14, 2011 12:08PM
Marnicx at 8:33PM, Oct. 23, 2007
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That's quite helpful, thank you both. I appreciate it.
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