Hey all,

Periwinkle Pixie here. Like many children of the 90s I spent many a weekday afternoon watching the wonderous sparkle-filled shiny anime that is Sailor Moon. I've decided to create a reimagining of Sailor Moon as a mainstream Superhero comic. Now, this is the first webcomic I've made, but I really enjoy it so far. I'm a long time comic book geek and am very excited to be making my own comic.

http://www.drunkduck.com/SENSHI

Synopsis:
Rini Tsukino is the top agent for National Emergency Garrison Agency (N.E.G.A.)'s metahuman affairs department. Plucked out from obscurity as a cryptologist working for local law enforcement, Rini becomes Japans new girl wonder, Agent Moon. As Moon, she leads N.E.G.A.'s team of super-powered agents, which includes Mars and Mercury. However, when Rini is confronted by a rogue agent of the mysterious SENSHI organization, dark secrets are revealed to Moon and her teammates...

for a doushinji.. the story is pretty good so far.
but i have a few critiques


1. the style seems to be completely off.
the characters that you use, barley resemble who you say theyre supposed to be. I think this will turn a lot of people off. at one moment it seems to be very shonen-action-realistic, and the next moment its magical girl shojo. i think you should stick to one theme.

2. you shade and tone incredibly well. but the drawings seem to be lacking. every page seems to be half colored. If your going to color you keep highlights and shadows -it looks unfinished just one tone like that. If your going to shade -focus on the characters as much as the background. your current style just looks kinda unfinished.

3. proportion. you seem to have really good bodies in some scenes, and horrible ones in others. I think you should focus on faces too. they seems to need the most work.

Thanks for the criticism mishi-hime!

I actually agree with pretty much everything you said. I'm an amateur artist who's only real experience is doodling in his notebooks, so I'm actually surprised at the fact that I was able to make anything at all. I know that I have a lot too work on in terms of body proportions etc. (as you've probably noticed i can't deal with hands... at all.)

As for the coloring... I simply can't take the time to do full color for all the pages. I just don't have the time... so I thought I'd try to use iconic splashes of color to identify key characters. Kind of sin city-ish?

And you've nailed me on the pin... Senshi isn't a finished work. But I honestly don't have the patience to muscle through detail backgrounds and layer and layers of color. I'd prefer to sacrifice a little on the art side and work on telling a story.

Thanks again for the criticism! I'll definitely try and work on your suggestions!

I agree with you, TIME is probably my biggest problem to overcome.
but i think if you lack on the art -eventually you'll look back on it and want to redo it. There are so many comics that end up deleting everything and starting over. I have no doubts that you'll get a lot faster as your comic progresses. A part of me likes the iconic colors.....but i thought rini's was pink.?
anyway good luck ^_^