Jacob is the story surrounding a teenage cat(in a cat world) who finds himself pursued by a strange group of characters whose motives aren't really established.
Chapter 2 has just started.
http://www.drunkduck.com/Jacob/
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[PLUG/CRIT] Jacob
Kleb
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Puff_Of_Smoke
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To be bluntly honest this comic is VERY stereotypical. I would suggest less of that... I would also suggest more practise on proportion, symetry, and... dear goodness the faces...
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I have a gun. It's really powerful. Especially against living things.
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Kleb
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What do you mean by stereotypical?
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seedyk
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I would try putting the panels closer together and adding some shading. I'm not sure what program your using, but for whatever reason, the colors never seem to touch the outline. If it's Photoshop, try making the outline on a seperate layer that way you can overlap the colors and not make it quite so inner halo-y.
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What do you mean by stereotypical?
He means that what you've set up is no different than any other story where a 15-20 year-old, spiky-haired male protagonist with a can-do attitude goes off to save the world and discovers magical powers within him. Theoretically, it wouldn't be hard to guess what all of your characters will do as your story progresses. Also, in my personal opinion six pages is rather small for a chapter.
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What do you mean by stereotypical?
He means that what you've set up is no different than any other story where a 15-20 year-old, spiky-haired male protagonist with a can-do attitude goes off to save the world and discovers magical powers within him. Theoretically, it wouldn't be hard to guess what all of your characters will do as your story progresses. Also, in my personal opinion six pages is rather small for a chapter.
Well, I guess you'll just have to find out what exactly happens then, coz you shouldn't count your chickens before they hatch. I am about half way through drawing the second chapter and nothing that you've predicted has been correct so far(not that I'm badmouthing you of course). And I do agree that six pages is very short, but that was only the first chapter, and it was more of a prologue. Second chapter will be a lot longer.
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