Hello! :-D This is what i've done so far in my project :3 Let me know what you think ^^ If something needs fixing, feel free to tell me. Just dont be mean about it. Being mean isnt very fun :( . But anyway, if you dont like magic, mythilogical monsters, and half naked women, Herald King is not for you my friend. :wink: Not recommended for kids 15 and under. http://www.drunkduck.com/Herald_King/
Take a look. *^^*

On the first page, you really drew me in the by the fact that you drew some pretty darn good backgrounds, its pretty nice you know? I also like the dynamic angle that you had in there on the first page too, lets see how this unfolds (commenting as I read). Also, that friggen close-up eye is great. In the second page, your lines are a little bit unstraight, not a big deal, just somethign to watch out for when you make more pages. You might try drawing on graph paper, then erasing the graph lines using photoshop (if you have it) and then just decrease the layer's level adjustments. It will also take away any eraser marks too, rather nifty thing. Your page size is also good, it is sometimes nice to make it a little bit smaller so that the reader doesn't really have to scroll, but it isn't incredibly huge -- its an okay size. I really love the effects that you use, using mainly the background, like the drop of water and the bird chirping -- great idea. What I didn't like though, was your random box with just text in it, it does keep the text important, but its not very interesting to look at. You could even try an angle of him looking at the creature, the viewer is looking at his back and the monster is looming over him, then if you don't have a very detailed background and if the panel is big, just throw the text in there as well. =3

If it takes you awhile to draw your comic pages, so what? It deserves the attention it needs to be great. =D On the sixth page, I don't really understand what is happening in the last panel... oh well, read on. I think using 'wtf' in the page where Kai wakes up is a little bit unnecessary, spelling it out won't hurt, especially for people who don't know what 'wtf' is (little amounts of people, but hey). Nearing the end pages, you get really, really text heavy. YOu might want to summarize that a little or take out any unnecessary puns so that well, the reader doesn't just skim over the stuff. Overall, I really like your comic and I am actually going to put it on my favorite list. Mainly, you have a really good style which borders on anime (via the eyes) but is still highly original, you draw great backgrounds, and also, your story is interesting, but it is only the beginning who knows? There are al ot of blurry spots on your pages, probably from erasers and such, so I suggest maybe sketching the page out first on the page before darkening it so that it doesn't have quite that effect when you erase.

Ps. Your backgrounds friggen rock. =D

ART - 7-8/10
STORY - ' '

Keep up the great work!

Thanks sooo much *^^* I work really hard on this project and i put all effort in to it even if some panels arent that great :3. But yea, i'll work on the overly texted bubble thing ^^ i'll put in less bubbles next time :D Sometimes I just throw in some random panel because im too busy to think of what to put in it :lol: like the the bubble where he's like "wtf" XD lolol. You're right. That was totally unnecessary :3

And once again, thank you so much for pointing out what needed fixing :3 You're words have motivated me alot :D

=D S'alright, we all get a little bit unknowing to what we are going. I usually just do that for the panel and go back and fix it before I submit it. ^^''

Added some new pages *^^*

Thanks :D i'll keep this in mind :3 I'll be working on those speech bubbles some and the panels. The bubbles were a little weird in some pages lol thanks again for pointing that out to me :wink: