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[Plug/Crit] Galactic Wastelanders
Biz3 at 5:14AM, Feb. 8, 2009
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http://www.drunkduck.com/Galactic_Wastelanders/

I've always wanted to try out creating a more story-driven comic, so I did. Galactic Wastelanders is a Sci-Fi/Adventure comic about two persons - each from a different part of a galaxy - and their story as they travel the galaxy to shape a saga of their own.

Any comments or feedback would be appreciated. :)
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makosuite at 9:17AM, Feb. 8, 2009
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Can't really draw too much out of a single page.

I'm not the one either to critique your artwork. I'm definitely more talented at the writing end of the spectrum. It's hard to get a grasp of the flow of your writing with this single page.

Positives that I can see so far are easy to read text bubbles with a font that isn't difficult to see. The addition of color also amps it up compared to the hoardes of B&W on this website.

The only negative in the writing thus far is on the bottom right panel. It says "You could with something." I don't understand what you're trying to say. It could be that I'm just misinterpreting what he's trying to say, or it may be a typo. Clarifying your writing to mean exactly what you mean makes it much easier on the readers.
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Biz3 at 11:03AM, Feb. 8, 2009
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Hey, thanks for the feedback!

Making the comic atheistically pleasing with colors, easily readable text and all that was a small goal along the way - nice to know that so far it's been successful. Guess there's really not much to say about the story already after the first page, bu that'll probably change a bit further out as the whole thing develops. As for the slightly hard to interpret sentence in the last frame, I have a bad habit from time to time to take use of various idioms in the dialogue, so some of the phrases may take a second glance to get (in this case he's speaking about grabbing a pick-me-up, which will probably become clear in the upcoming page).
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Biz3 at 8:55AM, March 3, 2009
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Bump! New page out!
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