Lo and behold. I humbly bring this comic before this forum mostly in search of more readers, but also willing to take criticism if anyone feels like giving it.
You can read it here .
I was on hiatus and have recently returned. I hope to redevelop a reader base.
going away - Hey Everyone Look What I Did!
[Plug/Crit] Flame of Earth --- In need of readers >:
Retaya
at 11:36PM, Oct. 23, 2009
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TheFlyingGreenMonkey
at 12:10AM, Oct. 24, 2009
Taking it out will make it a bit more dramatic and gives a hook for the audiance to grab at but I personally like the dialogue :D
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Retaya
at 12:13PM, Oct. 24, 2009
Yeah...the main reason for me wanting to get rid of the dialogue is so that it won't be so RACISM IS BAD and blatantly obvious. I kind of wanted a more mysterious vagueness to it, so I figured that getting rid of the dialogue and making it mostly symbolic would help...that way there can be multiple interpretations.
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TheFlyingGreenMonkey
at 2:35PM, Oct. 24, 2009
Retaya
Yeah...the main reason for me wanting to get rid of the dialogue is so that it won't be so RACISM IS BAD and blatantly obvious. I kind of wanted a more mysterious vagueness to it, so I figured that getting rid of the dialogue and making it mostly symbolic would help...that way there can be multiple interpretations.
Aah! Then yes taking it away will help meet that goal.
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harkovast
at 6:20PM, Oct. 24, 2009
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iamjenii
at 10:16AM, Oct. 26, 2009
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Retaya
at 5:44PM, Nov. 27, 2009
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Retaya
at 7:39PM, Jan. 11, 2010
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Retaya
at 11:22PM, March 18, 2010
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Retaya
at 10:49PM, April 4, 2010
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Retaya
at 9:00PM, May 1, 2010
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Retaya
at 10:37AM, June 16, 2010
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Retaya
at 8:54PM, July 7, 2010
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Retaya
at 10:09AM, Aug. 27, 2010
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Retaya
at 7:46AM, April 14, 2011
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Tim Wellman
at 8:11PM, April 14, 2011
You update once a year? :-) I mean, I'm lazy, but gez, once a year is really stretching it :-)
It's hard to offer any crits because there's so much time between updates.
I don't think the colors on the dragon page are bad... you may want to use a smaller brush and zoom (200-300%)in a bit when you do your shading, just to get those lines a bit tighter. The inking (and this is a crit for some older pages), you need to use the line tool sometimes on your buildings instead of freehanding it... that will just tighten up the artwork.
The character designs look good, the story seems solid (though with the time gaps in updating, it's hard to tell).
Get back to it!
It's hard to offer any crits because there's so much time between updates.
I don't think the colors on the dragon page are bad... you may want to use a smaller brush and zoom (200-300%)in a bit when you do your shading, just to get those lines a bit tighter. The inking (and this is a crit for some older pages), you need to use the line tool sometimes on your buildings instead of freehanding it... that will just tighten up the artwork.
The character designs look good, the story seems solid (though with the time gaps in updating, it's hard to tell).
Get back to it!
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Retaya
at 8:33PM, May 5, 2011
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