http://www.drunkduck.com/Elemental_Guardians

Dani wakes up one morning to find an interesting surprise. She turned into a he that has to kill an evil mastermind who just happens to be Danny's secret crush (he knows he's hott) and it just gets even more interesting as the story moves on.... btw this story has alot of yaoi in it (99.9%) so if you dont like it the dont look at my comic or leave any of those comments like "you should draw yaoi you suck at drawing it and yaoi is just an act against god" yes i got a comment like that before it was a very dark day for me and since that person went to school with me they well lets just say they have stiches and a cast >:D (they deserved it any ways they were being very rude to alot of ppl that day and need to be stop)

Hmmm, well, here's where I see improvement:

Work on drawing more of the body out than just the head and neck (I've seen you draw the body a couple times, but for a manga-type comic, I would expect a little more). Try not to force all the words into one panel. You can always let the words move on to the next one. Also avoid covering the face with text as well and I would recommend adding text bubbles. Colour would be nice, but we need to focus on basics first.

Um, organize the page a little better and don't feel obligated to add many panels to one page just to explain something. You can always break down the information if necessary and use it on more than one page.

Other than those, just try to work on anatomy and face a little and just keep going. It's definitely good for beginning a comic.

Thanks! I SHALL START WORKING ON THAT X3