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[Plug/Crit] BLOODMAN
twistedrabbit at 11:50AM, Dec. 17, 2008
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A twisted superhero story meshing Golden Age lore with dark art.
Next update is soon.
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KevDuck at 7:27PM, Dec. 18, 2008
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Your art is very intriguing, I like it a lot. The story seems pretty good too, but truth be told I stopped reading after a few pages because I grew tired of wading through the filler. It's generally a bad idea to have that much filler so early in the comic's run; you should probably get rid of it so that new readers can have an uninterrupted story.

A nitpick: I am very annoyed by the combination of hand-drawn speech balloons and digital fonts. Aesthetically, they should match. Also, tons of comics use Blambot's Digital Strip (I believe that's the font you're using). You have a unique comic: your choice of font should be equally unique. They have ton of dialogue fonts over there.

All in all, you have a pretty cool comic. Just clean up that filler. Please.
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Ludeshka at 7:08AM, Dec. 22, 2008
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I agree with what the poster above me said.
I really liked the last page, but then I clicked "First" to see what it was all about and there was a lot of filler and I got bored.
Your art is really catchy, very interesting to look at, but we are beings of lesser patience here on the internets, and I would have liked the story to start sooner.
I know it's a really annoying nitpick, but it's still true to me.

I seriously like the artwork and you have some interesting dialogue as well!
I'll wait and see what else happens. :)
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twistedrabbit at 10:39AM, Dec. 22, 2008
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Thank you both for the suggestions!
These are the things I don't think about when putting the comic together, so I appreciate the time you took to comment! The overall flow of the comic shouldn't have so many speed bumps. I know I've been turned off by webcomics before making the same mistake with filler.

So, the filler is all gone. I did however leave in the "artifacts" from the silver age, as they're more of a storytelling aid and a lot of people have told me they were attracted to the comic with the old-school feel of those pages.

The dialogue balloons always bugged me. And I haven't found a (legible) font I've liked. I have considered hand-writing all the text...and a few of the more artsy pages show me dabbling in this. I just went for legibility. And it does look disjointed in a comic where even the frames are bathed in organic style.

Here's hoping you both take a gander at a more user-friendly story. And I look forward to showing you the upcoming pages.

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harkovast at 10:41AM, Dec. 22, 2008
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Your comic is very creppy, very weird and unbearably violent.
Yeah, basically, I really like it!
I love the strange distorted style of it all. I am always drawn to webcomics with a unique look, and yours certainly has that.
You just need to update faster!

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twistedrabbit at 10:57PM, March 24, 2009
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Been a while since the last update, but I've been quite busy!

I've taken feedback into thought and the new page (page 16) incorperates these changes.

Please feel free to critique.
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