its a good comic 3 pages but only one veiwer NOTE: if you give me any sort of advice or say im looked down on ill give you a mute let me fail on mah own

Well, you put crit so I'm going to crit...

First things first, your grammer. In a comic, grammer is everything. With good grammer readers know what you're characters are saying. It also tends to look nice. Puting capitals in the beginning of every sentence and name will make your comic look rather nice. You have yet to capitalize the first letter in names. I suggest you do.

Second order of business, comic rating. You claim that you make an 'E' comic. The constant 'F bombs' say no. As Fysh said in your previous thread, (You didn't need to make another thread, by the way.) Saying a word just to show that you can say it, accomplishes nothing. As you yourself have stated, you're twelve. Would you say the F word in front of your mother or father? Would you show your comic to them? If they're like other parents, you would likely be 'grounded.' Cutting back on the language would obviously make your comic better.

Next, your bland sense of humour within the comic. If you want to make a funny comic you've got to be funny. It's an obvious requirement. Once again, as Fysh said in your other thread, try studying other humourous comics for ideas. Although, try not to copy their ideas... that can get really ugly. Try to really think about your jokes when you make them. Think whether the average person would find that a good joke. When in doubt, resort to puns!

bluebot092
let me fail on mah own

Lastly, don't get full of yourself after getting a couple fives. That leads to trouble.

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Don't put in your title if you don't want criticism.

Wait I'm confused...

First you write in your title that you want critique, but then in your post you say that anyone who gives you advice (another word for critique, really) will be muted...

So what is it you're looking for exactly...? Not being rude here, I'm just seriously confused.

Here Maria, I'll explain. In his last thread he put up , and I thought he actually wanted critique. I told him what I thought, he apparently didn't like it, and made a new thread. So I'm thinking he doesn't know what "crit" means.


EDIT: Not to put you down in anyway. *sigh*

Thanks Fysh. :)

It's too bad... But hey, he's still young. I didn't really care for crits at his age either. lol Later on he might like them better and understand them better. Some people think crits are about bashing the artist when it's all the opposite.

Aw well :)