Follow the adventures of the rogue Teodor in the World of Azeroth. He has two sides as well- a good side in the form of a paladin, and an evil side in the form of a warlock. While the rogue travels in Kalimdor to find a safe spot, he stumbles across two of his party members (the ones he hate, but oddly, he sticks to them) and after they go to the Eastern Kingdoms, they stumble on the draenei of the party. Enjoy the comic. Stay tuned every Monday and Saturday.


http://www.drunkduck.com/A_Rogue_with_Two_Sides/

Ok. I read like 80% of this. About 3/5 of the beginning and about 6 at the end.



Art: I can't believe I actually have to comment on the art for a screen shot comic... but here goes. Lackluster positions. Fix: Get a tutorial about posturing WoW characters, maybe even an editing program, I know they are out there. Occasional fuzzy screen shot. Fix: I have no idea what you are doing wrong here, upgrade your graphics card?


Writing: The jokes fall flat for one. A lot weird language is used. Sometimes words are missing, misspellings ect. The characters are kind of 2D or even 1D if that's possible. Try exposing unique idiosyncrasies or character traits to make your characters seem more real. Take a writing class, ask someone to read what you wrote before you post it, get microsoft word and put your writing in that before you put it into your comic, it might help with grammar issues.


Plot/sequential story telling: I'm really not sure what is going on in these. I'm sure I would get it if I thought about it but it shouldn't take any mental gymnastics to understand where your comic is actually trying to go. Hard to tell how your characters got to where they are or why they are there in the first place. Clear transitions between strips are needed. Take a creative writing class to improve upon this if you feel like it.



Overall: I don't get it. I'm no stranger to things that are hard to grasp, my own comic gets that crit all the time. However, unless you are a very strange kind of troll I can't really guess what you are trying to do.

Keep it up, start experimenting you'll get it eventually.



Best wishes XOXO,
Charlie

charlie_everyone
Ok. I read like 80% of this. About 3/5 of the beginning and about 6 at the end.



Art: I can't believe I actually have to comment on the art for a screen shot comic... but here goes. Lackluster positions. Fix: Get a tutorial about posturing WoW characters, maybe even an editing program, I know they are out there. Occasional fuzzy screen shot. Fix: I have no idea what you are doing wrong here, upgrade your graphics card?


Writing: The jokes fall flat for one. A lot weird language is used. Sometimes words are missing, misspellings ect. The characters are kind of 2D or even 1D if that's possible. Try exposing unique idiosyncrasies or character traits to make your characters seem more real. Take a writing class, ask someone to read what you wrote before you post it, get microsoft word and put your writing in that before you put it into your comic, it might help with grammar issues.


Plot/sequential story telling: I'm really not sure what is going on in these. I'm sure I would get it if I thought about it but it shouldn't take any mental gymnastics to understand where your comic is actually trying to go. Hard to tell how your characters got to where they are or why they are there in the first place. Clear transitions between strips are needed. Take a creative writing class to improve upon this if you feel like it.



Overall: I don't get it. I'm no stranger to things that are hard to grasp, my own comic gets that crit all the time. However, unless you are a very strange kind of troll I can't really guess what you are trying to do.

Keep it up, start experimenting you'll get it eventually.



Best wishes XOXO,
Charlie

The critics, I accept.