just something new i made i like your view on the art stile i been tring to make
http://www.drunkduck.com/Desert_days/

King goes for a walk and some how gets eaten by an monster . Then finds him self in the Desert with headache and he meets an magic talking toy bunny that lookiung for a lost city it teems up with him to find that a lost city and get of the heat

Well, you certainly have an eye for coloring. Something I admire, since I'm so lousy with coloring. Your coloring is very pleasant and vibrant to look at, and you blend it into the shadows well

I'm not too crazy with the art-style, though. I can certainly see you're using the Pen Tool, and badly so. It's very pointy and bordering on lazy (the outlines). If you spent more time on it and softened the lines a little and kept a consistency (right now it's FAT thin FAT thin medium FAT thin), it would look so much better

As for the storyline? There's only two pages up, so I can't really say much. The second page was very confusing though. He wanted water, and got it? Or not? I wasn't totally 100 on what was happening

thanks i cant help the way the inking looks the way i ink it comes out randomly ad its hard to control

Patience is a virtue, and one of the most important things an artist should have

The art style needs improvement; however the coloring and inking are great. Your story is quite short but looks promising.