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[PLUG/CRIT - but don't be too harsh!] Faceless
Sayomi at 8:11AM, Feb. 24, 2011
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I've quacked all my best friends about my new comic, Faceless, and so far I think it's a hit.
Pleas read it, there's only three pages as of now, and tell me how to improve and what you like about it, but don't be too mean to me please because i'm still learning!
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I Am The 1337 Master at 11:47AM, Feb. 24, 2011
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I'll be 1337 style mean.

1. The colored pencils are nice but occasionally the shading is rough.

2. Some characters seem awkward in some panels and amazing in others.

3. The quality of the pages is taken away by the shitty lighting.

4. I personally hate the homepage feature but that's my problem.

5. I have no other critique.


It looks like it could be a great comic. :)


By the way, your banner in your signature is far too big. You'll have to resize it.
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Sayomi at 12:06PM, Feb. 24, 2011
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Okay, first point is the first page was like that cos I didn't shade hard enough to make it show up so I had to use effects and that came out.
Secondly, what do you mean awkward? Like, how?
The lighting is like that because of his rubbish lamp, so I figured I'd make it realistic, like it actually look like.
Yeah. I'm still not sure what a homepage actually is, I just turned it on for fun.
5. Good.
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I Am The 1337 Master at 12:13PM, Feb. 24, 2011
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By shitty lighting I meant the scanner's lighting. The computer's scanning them in roughly and it's taking away.

Are they physically taken pictures or something?



The banner should be good now.
Or it might not be. I don't remember...
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Sayomi at 12:16PM, Feb. 24, 2011
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Which page are you talking about with the worst lighting problem?
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I Am The 1337 Master at 2:18PM, Feb. 24, 2011
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The first page is helped by the light, it looking darker and devious but on the following I see it make the pages look blurry.
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shirkersama at 10:32PM, Feb. 24, 2011
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I agree with 1337 about the lighting, it's just kind of off. But the art seems good to me.
It's really too early to judge the writing, but so far there hasn't been a hook. That's fine because you're only a few pages in, but you're going to need something fairly soon.
That's all I really have for criticism. The comic is off to a good start, keep it up.
Edit: One thing I forgot to mention, I dislike your speech bubbles. I'm not sure why, but the way they look bothers me.
Meh
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Sayomi at 12:22AM, Feb. 25, 2011
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Hmm, I wonder why? They're just circles with tails. If you tell me what you don't like I can improve it but if you don''t then I don't know how, but thanks anyway.
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Genejoke at 12:59AM, Feb. 25, 2011
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What software are you using to make the speech bubbles?
New comic alert. [..]
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shirkersama at 1:23AM, Feb. 25, 2011
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After comparing your speech bubbles to a couple other comics, the borders of yours seem thicker than most. Especially on the first page, which bothered me more. They just feel unnatural and bulky to me when coupled with your hand drawn art.
But it's really a very mild complaint on my part, and I am by no means an expert on stuff like this (I use MS Paint for Christ's sake), so I wouldn't worry too much about it.
Meh
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