i'd appreciate it if you'd critique. constructive criticism is fine with me, i probably wont hate you if you dissed it, but at least explain what it was that you hate about it.


anyways, here's the link:


http://www.drunkduck.com/Story_of_My_Life/index.php



synopsis:

there arent rlly much of a plot. just more of a gag-a-day kind of thing, however, recently, the plots are built by the chapter and ends at the conclusion of it.

the art at the very beginning is average at best, and there is bascially no plot whatsoever.

all in all, it is just a story that pokes fun of my life and the people in it.



and that concludes my critque.
your turn.

Someone
there arent rlly much of a plot.

Pay more attention in school, and draw less in class. Being able to find the apostrophe in "aren't", and add the vowels to "really", along with capitalization will get you a lot farther than a comic strip.

End grammar nazism.

I think the art itself is good for a rough sketch. Take a little more time to polish the drawings off. Your chapter pages are really good though. I like the color work. They're also the most finished looking line-work wise.

As for the story, there really isn't one. Not to sound mean, but from a clinical standpoint, I just don't care about the character. There's nothing going on to bring the reader in. It may be a day-in-the-life. But don't take that so literally. Take something mundane and turn it into an entertaining story. Remember that cartoon show Bobby's World? This kid with a giant head would take the most ordinary situation and turn it into the Battle of the Bulge.

Overall, since you're a sophomore...I'll give it a C+. Much better than some of the crap out there, but you need to build on your foundation. Work towards making all your pages look like your chapter pages.

But most importantly, work on your story. Having a compelling story will overcome all flaws in art. Look at the better sprite, or stick-man comics.

thanks theobrien. =]

theobrien

Someone
there arent rlly much of a plot.

Pay more attention in school, and draw less in class. Being able to find the apostrophe in "aren't", and add the vowels to "really", along with capitalization will get you a lot farther than a comic strip.

End grammar nazism.

That should be "isn't" instead of "aren't" anyway... "There isn't really much of a plot."

End grammar WW2.

Anyways, I like gag-a-day comics in general and read quite a few of them like xkcd, Thinkin' Lincoln' and Perry Bible. Let me point you to Thinkin' Lincoln, even though it is a gag a day comic and there are only a couple of jokes that run more than one page each character has his or her own personality and you begin to form likes and dislikes.

The problem I find is that you've called the comic "Story of My Life" but I can't tell which of the characters is you exactly and which are secondary characters. I don't know much about what 'you' are like, y'know what I mean? A little character introduction would go a long way. :D

The doodles are actually pretty good and if you're not interested in creating proper comics with proper art then it's just fine, don't try and change it. One suggestion I would have is to try and keep your frames in a straight line... they seem to fall off the right side of the page.

Not much more I can say about the comic. There isn't really much of a plot. :p
But work on your art even if you don't really want to. Every little helps. As for not drawing in class... I drew loads in class and left high school with the best grades in my year. But studying lots helps too.

hahaha. Sure, once I find a ruler that isn't broken ^^