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The first chapter finished going live today, and I just want a few opinions before I start drawing up the second chapter properly. ^_^
I'm expecting the whole story to be about 60 chapters or so, so at a chapter a month that's a 5-year commitment. O_O Which is why I don't want it to suck. The first chapter's not got a whole lot of story because it's just an introduction but I've got a rough outline already, so it's not as plotless as it seems. XD

I'd mostly like a few hints on, well, everything. This is my first attempt and I'm not really sure of myself yet. Thanks in advance. ^_^

Well, to me, some of the pages look a bit too busy. Too many things going on without a real sense of direction.

Also, you might want to consider solid white in the text bubbles. I noticed on the first few pages that some of the text was really hard to read because the text was too similar to the dark background.

And finally, one thing that helped me tremendously, was one of those little wooden mannequins! Not only are they fun to play with, but they make excellent reference pieces.

Uh-huh, thank you! ^_^

The first thing was that I was kinda scared of having too little happening. I'll try to work more on the layouts, that should make it easier to read, right?

OK, I'll increase the opacity in the text bubbles. On the first couple of pages I just got really annoyed that so much of the artwork was being covered by text. XD That's probably best remedied by having less dialogue though.

Yup, I figured some of my anatomy was off. I've been working on that since November but I've still got a lot to learn.

Thanks very much for the advice! ^_^

No porblem. One more piece of advice on the text bubbles: Size 12 font, centered. This way, you can shape an oval to fit it tightly enough as to not cover too much art, OR: use the text bubbles to cover mistakes.

That's what I do ^-^'

=v_v= I draw all my text bubbles freehand, because I use GIMP and don't know otherwise. I'll try making the bubbles fit the text more tightly though, that's a common-sense thing I never even thought of. XP