OwO I want to improve, it is why I share my art >w>
Sooooo... A lil about M.H.L ^^-
It's shonen-ai! You know what it means, don't you? ... If you don't then, I'll tell you. Shonen-ai means boy's love, so, boy/boy relation you see? It's like the yaoi, but in softer. Ok, the only thing I REALY don't want to hear about is the fact that there is no backgrounds, I'm already trying to be able to do them D=... If it isn't about that, then I want to hear! =P


oh, and btw, english isn't my first language, so forgive the mistakes, please. :kitty:

link to the comic: http://www.drunkduck.com/My_Hated_Love/index.php?p=258468

hun.. finally, there will not be only shonen-ai XD

I like the pencil looks, but it's difficult to figure out where you characters are right now without at least one panel having a background image. Trust me though, I'm the last person who should be commenting about needing to put backgrounds into their comics....

;P

Lawl, I really do try, but I just can't ^^; I still try...

ROFL. first shonen-ai comic I've seen. IN YEARS.

Oh, yay! Shounen ai!

I do love the boy-kissing, as does everyone else. There seems to be some human-animal transforming which strikes me as neat. Can't wait to see what you do with that. Art is good and improving.

Though, at the beginning, it's a little hard to figure out who's who and whatnot. You don't formally (or informally, whatever) introduce the characters, so we're pretty much dumped into their lives without much of an introduction. I realize that this may in fact be advice given a little two late since you have 20+ pages already, and the interviews were probably an attempt to remedy that, but nothing beats a good introduction and gradually introducing background information over a couple pages. I forbid you from infodumping.

Other than the occasional misspelled word and awkward phrasing, your English is pretty good, but you probably may want to have another person look at your script/page before posting it online.

You have a good start! Just keep drawing (especially boy-kissing. ~Chu!).

trevoramueller
I like the pencil looks, but it's difficult to figure out where you characters are right now without at least one panel having a background image. Trust me though, I'm the last person who should be commenting about needing to put backgrounds into their comics....

;P

hahah

But you are right! Backgrounds and other details will give the reader a good idea about where the character is, what they were doing in scene before the reader saw them and will make the writing easier because you won't have to explain so much..