Hi folks :)
I've recently uploaded the final page of my first comic called 'The Freak', and I was wondering if one or two of you would like to give me some constructive criticism on it?
Go on. Be brutal. And be warned that it contains some slightly bad language, naughty finger gestures and finger breakage.
Here's a link to it:http://www.drunkduck.com/The_Freak/index.php?p=584931
going away - Hey Everyone Look What I Did!
[Crit] My Comic 'The Freak'
Trisscar
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DOUK
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Read a bunch of pages and I like it so far. Only suggestion I have though is maybe add shading sometimes, because when there are a few objects in a panel its just a bunch of white lines.
Keep up the good work I love it :D
Keep up the good work I love it :D
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Trisscar
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Right. More detail next time. Will do! (salute)
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Amperschwa
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That was pretty good!
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Syas
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Wow, that was great! :D I loved the story. I agree about the shading, but I love the style of it. Also, I would suggest writing out some of the sounds some more(like when he snapped the guy's finger- a nice "Crack!" would have worked well). Other than that, really well done, and I hope to read more. :)
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Trisscar
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I'm getting mixed responses regarding including sound effects. I'll try them in the next comic and see how it goes.
Thanks for the feedback, everyone :)
Thanks for the feedback, everyone :)
last edited on July 14, 2011 4:34PM
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