Missing Days of February is the first webcomic I ever submit to this grand audience that is the internet. It's kind of scary for me, because the internet is so big that things might get lost in it. I intend to tell a story I really believe in, but I don't just want to tell it, I want to tell it well.

I would like to know what you think.

Sticks and stones may break my bones, but critiques are a very important part of an artist's life, so go ahead, I won't mind. :D


Thank you very much for your time. :)

Looks really interesting, but trying to read the text is killing me. The art is great so far though.

Your art is really cool and intriguing. You need a link here so that people can easily get to your comic. Here I'll make you one Missing Days of February ...

Compliments:

I really like seeing multiple angles, such as from above and below and from the back, which is weirdly underrepresented in everything I've read lately. Also, holy dang, the entire work is not basically close-up shots of faces. When multiple subjects are depicted they're on multiple levels to add visual interest and have noticeably different character designs. This is all neat stuff.

It's so cool that during the flashback, Waleran is dieting and says "when I become a necromancer I will wear gloves all the time," and in the future is ultra-thin and wearing black gloves. Continuity! Plus, I'm already fond of Waleran in particular. It's too early to have strong feelings for the characters that haven't yet been shown much, but if they're similarly distinguished, they should also be memorable.

Criticisms:

I wish the borders of speech bubbles were a little more clearly defined so that the thin stems reaching toward people were more obvious. Also, that font makes the letter 't' look like the letter 'p' to me, which is a repeated problem.

I generally like the sketchiness of the art and panel borders, but occasionally it goes really far and looks like preliminary framework that detail would be placed on rather than a finished piece. Similarly, the smudginess of the shading lends atmosphere to the work, but sometimes is so smudgy that it could use a little more contrast. Overall, I like this and will be following it.

Good news:
-Goddamn fantastic intro, had me hooked.
-seductive, innocent, fun yet sleek and sexy art style.
-great storytelling, every panel is clean, clear and well done for the most part.

Bad news:
-despite that great intro, I didnt really feel like the comic i was reading was what you described. but then again, that might have more to do with my second problem...
-as mentioned before, the text in the speech bubbles is awful. so much so that i stopped reading it after the second page and just flipped through for the art.
-You rely on tones a bit too much. i am of the opinion that tones should never replace lines to show emotion in the face, especially angry faces. but thats a nitpick more than anything.
-the art is begging to be inked, or at least "cleaned up" a bit more. darker lines on the characters would make them pop more.
-the page layouts are boring, but this isnt too much of a problem.
-backgrounds look half-assed.

a little more effort will make this comic really pop and be something to see.

5/10

Thank you everyone!

(And Thank you very much, Warpedwenger, I didn't think of the link. My goodness, I bet my noob status is showing all over the place! Thanks a lot for covering that up for me :D)

I will absolutely change the font. I can't vouch for my writing to be any good, but hey, at least I should be able to make it readable and let you decide! :D

Thank you all for the criticisms! Some problems might take time to be solved, but I do want to improve so I'll just work harder :D

December bump.
Chapter 2 started.

Crits and feedback would be very, very appreciated. :)

I must say, you have an interesting art style.

Good interesting too.

The art is interesting and the comic does have potential. However, the comic does seem to suffer a bit from what I like to call "Now we're in an airplane!" syndrome. You keep jumping back and forth between multiple scenes that it becomes hard to track and comprehend properly. You're best off sticking with one group of characters through a scene then transition rather than show one page with one group, two of another group, go back and do another page for the first one, etc. I'm not sure if this is something you've already caught, but it's definitely something that would improve the story's flow.

I like interrupting because I feel like a party crasher. You know, "Oh, NOW I'm beginning to understand!" and then I interrupt and throw an obstacle in your way.
It's something I really enjoy when I read it in profesional fiction, you know, the feeling that there is more....

Of course, that could totally end up as VERY annoying if it isn't done properly.

I'll do my best to find a balance, so that it won't seem totally random.

Thanks a lot for your input. I'll keep it in mind :)

Since it is Missing Days of February....I figured it'd be okay to do a February bump.

I have reached 30 pages already!
I'm kinda proud, because this is, after all, my first attempt at webcomicking. :D

I would like to hear your opinions! Crit, crit to your heart's content! :D

I very much intend to read this eventually, y'know when I have the time and the readity. I speaks good.