When a young high school student named April goes digging into her attic one day, she finds a box that contains a mysterious necklace...

Well, this thread is for plugging and critting as well as any plot discussion and so on. My comic has already jumped into the top 500 (Well, top 508, actually) in its category and is in the top 100 in Manga, so I figured some criticism wouldn't hurt.

By the way, my Avatar image has nothing to do with this comic. Seriously.

Have fun!

This link takes you straight to the first page!

"For my eyes only"?... I feel so special.

Cthulhu
"For my eyes only"?... I feel so special.

You should :). I know, it's an odd idea taking a military term and making it romantic. I was surprised nobody had already chosen this title...

Anyway, I'm giving this a bump because, from page 8 onwards, it shall be IN COLOR!

A bump because I'm over 1,000 hits, am in the top 350 for comic books, and am just that awesome!

Okay, I'll try to give crit as best I can.

The thing that stood out for me about this comic was the pacing. It manages to maintain a quick pace without ever getting sketchy about what's going on. In fact, the no-nonsense clarity I found really attractive. Though drawn in a manga style, the panelling is done closer to the American tradition, nice chunky panels with events tond in a clear sequence. Maybe it could stand to be more dramatic though. Spending more time working on composing pages with regard to positioning and shape of panels and choice of the distance and angle of shots could really enhance the mood and make pages more dynamic.
The art, likewise, is clear, clean, simple. Like the dialogue and the panelling, the's a really clear grasp of how to tell a story with sequential art that lots of people don't 'get'.
So my advice is to go from this very solid foundation and just build up from it. It's a good way to do things, lots of artists have all the flowery surface detail sorted, but don't understand the basics of making a comic. Try improving the line quality of the artwork, perhaps experiment with some shading, play with te layout a bit more.
It's on my faves list, and I can see it becoming very good.
Good luck!

Darth Mongoose
Okay, I'll try to give crit as best I can.

The thing that stood out for me about this comic was the pacing. It manages to maintain a quick pace without ever getting sketchy about what's going on. In fact, the no-nonsense clarity I found really attractive. Though drawn in a manga style, the panelling is done closer to the American tradition, nice chunky panels with events tond in a clear sequence. Maybe it could stand to be more dramatic though. Spending more time working on composing pages with regard to positioning and shape of panels and choice of the distance and angle of shots could really enhance the mood and make pages more dynamic.
The art, likewise, is clear, clean, simple. Like the dialogue and the panelling, the's a really clear grasp of how to tell a story with sequential art that lots of people don't 'get'.
So my advice is to go from this very solid foundation and just build up from it. It's a good way to do things, lots of artists have all the flowery surface detail sorted, but don't understand the basics of making a comic. Try improving the line quality of the artwork, perhaps experiment with some shading, play with te layout a bit more.
It's on my faves list, and I can see it becoming very good.
Good luck!

Thank you for complementing it being a more American style. I've actually had to defend my position of using a more Americanized format and way of placing panels. Some people have told me "You're artwork is manga style, so why not do it right-to-left like other manga artists do?"

My response is a swift: "Well, I'm an American artist and this is an American comic, dammit!"

You're definitely right on positioning and panels, that's the one thing that tends to bother me the most and I'll have to build up some SERIOUS bravery before I go too far into shading; it's my biggest weakness.

Thanks for the crit, DM!

Now, to go and peruse some of DM's comics in thanks! :)

And now another bump! I'm bumping today because the second chapter starts tomorrow! The chapter-end filler art is officially over! (For this chapter, anyway...)