Hey, everyone! Look what I did!

"The Beast" is a story about teenage girl Helen Fitzgerald, who is suffering physical and sexual abuse at the hands of the Beast, a monster who visits her at nighttime.

It's an attempt to write a realistic, dramatic comic about a serious theme. I would truly appreciate any criticism or feedback you can throw my way. Be brutal! (Honest, too, but brutal.)

http://www.drunkduck.com/The_Beast/index.php?p=568858

By the way, my colorist resigned from the project after only 8 pages. Do you think it's fine the way it is? Should I convert all my pages to strictly black and white?

Man, it's been ten days. I KNOW people have looked at this comic. Doesn't anyone have anything negative to say about it? Should I start alienating people to try and get a response?

I'm not qualified really but I'll give it a shot.

It's a very heavy story, and it seemed to me that you told it in an effective way. The only part of the story that didn't *quite* work for me was the end, because I guess I saw it coming at least several pages ahead of time, so I was hoping there'd be something else to surprise me.

I don't really like the font! (Man is this a tough crit or what?! : D) It's legible and all, but rather flabby and plain, and I think there are others that would convey the tone of your story more effectively.

You asked about the color, and actually I found the most visually striking page to be "Awake," which is all black and white. Although the cross-hatching is irregular (all different directions and weights across his shirt in the top picture, for instance), the dark shadows and the grayscale really brought the mood home for me; the way the page gradually zooms in on her eyes works well, and the text is paced nicely.

Hey, thanks for your help!

I'll check out some fonts and work on the arrangement of pages to make the end less anti-climactic. This is just the first 8 pages. I wanted to get some feedback at this point, but I've got about 20 more finished pages.

Ah, cool, it'll be interesting to see where you go with it.

Today I finally got around to uploading all of my finished pages. I've got 27 pages up now, and I've re-worked the ordering to balance it out better.

Give it a shot. I really want feedback, so if you're the type of person who looks down on all aspiring artists, check it out! Then message me about how terrible my anatomy is or how awful my cross-hatching came out.

Thanks!