I would love a Critique!
http://www.drunkduck.com/Cave_Canem/index.php?p=114228

This is a new ongoing story about Syria ( a girl who is cursed by a Beast.) This takes place in a unkown time in the future when animals rule more than half the Earth and Humans are scattered in huge wasteland deserts and seperated by menacing forests.

Please reveiw and enjoy! has a full storyline and back story!
As well I need someone to color for me.. as you can see I suck at it.

It's hard to give a proper critique with only four pages up on your site, but here I go.

First of all, there's too much text on the first three pages. I realize that it's the prologue and future pages will likely look different, but I've gotta go with what you've shown so far. You've got to hook the reader from the beginning, and my first impression of the comic didn't intrigue me to read on. Why? So far, the drawings seem more like excerpts from comic pages. They're not complete in themselves, and they don't make sense because you're only showing part of the picture. The story sounds cool, but the visuals need a lot of work. Instead of trying to find someone to color for you (good coloring can cover up weak lineart sometimes), I think you should focus on improving your lineart first and invest more time in each page. Instead of having one drawing and a large amount of text underneath, try to have several drawings / panels with smaller amounts of text to go with them.

Let's take the very first page for example. First impressions are important, you know. You could have one panel showing a landscape of your world, with just the header "This is the earth". The landscape should have a distinct look and feel that makes the reader realize at once that this is not the world as we know it. That way, he/she will want to read on to see what kind of "earth" this is. (Showing is always better than telling.) The next panel could show some more of those sand waste lands with something to show that "there was once a highly advanced race of humanoids", like ruins of modern city buildings sticking out from beneath the sand. You're trying to tell an epic tale - make it LOOK epic. ;) The next panel could show traces of that "epic war" you speak of. That could be an actual scene of the war or a picture of the remains of a battle field. Another panel could be devoted to the statement about that the proud race of man once ruled the earth. And at last, there should be another intriguing picture of Syria's earth to go with the last two sentences, maybe with a close-up of a "beast" in the foreground and some waste land landscape in the background.

That's five panels with little amount of text for each panel. An alternative would be to have one big drawing showing a lot more details of the world, a picture that's visually so good that it will make us want to read the text. I think that's what we would call a splash page. Those are harder to pull off if you're an inexperienced comic artist.

Of course these measures will require you to put a lot more time into your comic, but that's what everyone with a good webcomic has to inevitably do. I know comickers who spend 15+ hours on each page. Some can make good pages in 3-4 hours. Of course it's not the amount of time that counts, but the result; however, good results can't be rushed

That said, I like the dinosaur / beast / animal thing on your first page, and the technological thingie on page three... whatever it is. I do see potential there. Your humans need some work. I encourage you to practice drawing humans using a good anatomy book, or photographic reference, or even sketching live people. You'll be surprised how much better your art will get if you give it some serious effort.

Hope that was helpful.

Wow thanks!! Thats actually really helpful! Ok I think I will spend more time on each page.. I have a problem with only sketching and not fully doing things.. a problem most of my art teachers have told me, too much raw not enough honed. Thank you . I will deffinetly redo the first pages in a way that is way more pleasing and will practice my humans!

One thing to add to Cookie's wonderful advice:

You may want to use a spell/grammar check program before you post your pages, or maybe have someone else look at the text carefully. There are quite a few grammar and spelling errors, and someone who is good with the technical aspects of writing might also be able to help you break up those big blocks of text better (being slightly A.D.D., as I am, it can be hard to get the real point of what someone is trying to say in a comic when it's a bunch of text strung together like that). This is important because when I read a comic for the first time and it has a lot of these kinds of errors, I will assume either that the author's first language isn't English, or that they don't feel like taking 5 minutes to make it right. If they don't feel like investing that little time to fix it or get someone who knows the language better to help them, I don't really feel inclined to invest much time into reading it.

The occasional typo is, of course, going to happen, but it would be nice if you maybe looked back at the first few pages and fixed them up.