Please take some time to check out my comic Energize. It now has 13 pages of Part1 posted in full colour.

I am terrible at HTML and all that but i will try and create a link, if this doesn't work, sorry.

http://www.drunkduck.com/Energize

Thanks

The art could use a little work but panels and story line are very nicely done... definitely going to check in on this comic from time to time.

DemonSaintDante
The art could use a little work but panels and story line are very nicely done... definitely going to check in on this comic from time to time.

At the very beginning I had the same impression about the artwork - but as the story progresses, Nepath's getting better. The last page looks pretty pro to me.

A little hint from me would be to redesign the title page, it's just too sterile. Superhero comics tend to have all kinds of flashy things on the covers - explosions, projectiles, etc. Your comic has that inside - so why not show it? You definitely have the skills.

This comic shows lots of promise. My comments on the improvements needed are on the actual current page of the book.

I dunno... i think he has come a good ways in a short ammount of pages but the art still needs work. The cover could be redone with an epic hero pose... (it is a super hero comic) The word bubbles are nicely done... lol

DemonSaintDante
I dunno... i think he has come a good ways in a short ammount of pages but the art still needs work. The cover could be redone with an epic hero pose... (it is a super hero comic) The word bubbles are nicely done... lol

I don't see a thing wrong with the art on the current page.

I gotta say it's nice to see a straight superhero comic. I'm sick of Superhero parodies. So many bad superhero parody comics...ughhh. It's a real breath of fresh air to see a superhero story that's just a superhero story.

So, the main thing I see here is capable, but lazy art. There's some great figure drawing, but there's no strong sense of motion on the characters, frequently blur filters are being used rather than the motion being drawn in, and the fights and stuff feel really dry due to a lack of sound effects. It may seem cheesy to use 'THWACK!' or whatever when a guy gets punched, but it really helps involve the reader.
The backgrounds need attention. The comic starts with our heroes standing in a dark void, then we get a photo of the earth, some people stood in various coloured voids and a shot of a city that looks like a heavily photoshopped photograph, and it totally vague, it's impossible to tell beyond 'it's a town or city' what kind of place the girl who wears eighties clothing is in.
So basically, the artist is clearly very competent. They just need to put in a bit more time and effort.

Well i can understand the black void in the beginning... keep the mystery for future reference and all but yeah... the rest is right.

you read zetman?

that is a good superhero comic.
prolly better then anything western ever made lol.


anyways i prolly shouldent comment at all since i dont really like superhero comics i think they are the bottom scrap after strips of the comic world.

unless its done innovativly like zetman for example.

anyways some more movement do speed lines and shit or blur it with the ink.

also your panel work in the Fighting scenes are so confusing casue the lack of bordering just gets you cometly out of it.

try keeping consistent not overlapping panels and still guide the reader actionpackedly.

what you want is to present as much as possible as easy viewable to your reader...

thats more importent then confusing the reader.

and well, i think its supermanesque and i think superman is super lame.
even tho this hero actually is getting beaten wich is better.

but your battles are the mother of generic boring fights with out any twists of a battle at all.

i dunno as i said i shouldent comment as ill just cut down shit far down..

into the never hoodness of nothingness..

but keep going and youll prolly get into it even further and master it. eventually.

Nice work! Watch out for proportions of bodies, heads, etc. (Page 11, panel 3 stuck out in my mind), but your colors are marvelous. And I've always loved crosshatching styles.

The story is compelling, I'm interested to see where the story goes, but be careful of keeping the times understandable. So far so good, but the story starts in one time frame, then goes into a past part of the story, yet apparently there's yet more past than this. So I'm not sure what you have planned for the story, but piling mystery on top of mystery can get confusing if the reader isn't clear where they are in the story. For now, though, the story does a nice job of sucking people in and keeping them interested. Keep up the good work!

Please come read my superhero comic. It now has 19 pages of full colour action...