first off, i know this is kinda shameless & sligtly bold of me, but ive finaly
created a character and story line that i feel is 100% mine. in the past ive
constantly scrapped ideas because i felt that it was too similar to something that
was already out there.

anyway, ive finaly started writing a script for the first time, for my first actual
comic ever. i'm only three pages in, but i'm rediculously proud of my currently
3 page teaser comic & the monolouge that goes along with it, i had to get somebody
to read it & hopefuly get some feed & direction.

thank you for taking the time to read, & i apoligize if you find this to be a waste
of your time, but i'm sure alot, if not all, of you can appriciate what i'm feeling
right now.


Script- Fire Kraker Issue 1: Powder Keg

Page 1: Full page image- bird’s eye view of a busy city between dusk & night. Street lights lit and inner thoughts of Powder Keg displayed in captions.

Opening Monologue: “Emperor City. The largest city in the world; the city of kings. Some of the richest and most powerful men in the country call this place home; as well as some of the most twisted and demented low lives you could imagine. You’re either makin’ a lot of noise, or you’re just another face that they say don’t even matter. At first glance Emperor City looks like a thriving, standard of living and business for the rest of the world to take notice of. But in reality, this place is a swamp."

Page 2: Five panel page. Monologue continued and finished by page 3’s end.

Panel 1- Close up shot of a politician standing at a podium in a courthouse giving a crooked smirk.
Monologue Cont. - Between the crooked politicians……

Panel 2- Medium shot of a bank heist in progress. Three masked men holding assault rifles tower over civilians on their knees with their hands on top of their heads.

Monologue Cont. – Crooks and criminals……..

Masked Man #1- Everybody keep your hands on your heads and your faces in the ground!
Masked Man #2- (screaming at the teller) What’s the code to the damn vault?!

Panel 3- Medium shot of ghoulish, shadowed figures of manic men are seen reaching out toward the screen.

Monologue Cont. – and straight up scum, this place should have been swallowed whole and shat out into a broken down pile of despair years ago by the very same defective parts that make it run.

Panel 4- A full shot of the city sky line well after night fall.

Monologue Cont. - But see, that’s where I come in to play.

Panel 5- Same shot as in panel 4. The peaceful sight of the skyline is interrupted by a powerful blast.

Monologue Cont. – You may be wondering just who I am, or what it is that I do exactly……..

Page 3: 2 panel page. Monologue is completed.

Panel 1- Hero stands in front of a burning getaway car unfeelingly. 2 men are tied unconscious to a near by pole.

Monologue Cont. – They called me Powder Keg.

Panel 2- Same scene but closed in on hero’s face.

Monologue Fin. – And I make a lot of noise.

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I like the ending, a little explosion is a nice way to introduce a character.
The whole cleaning up the city putting badguys in jail is a little cliche though.
I find it kind of odd how you go from talking about rich and powerful men to focusing on the lowlife criminals.
Maybe on page two you show the image of the rich men and their devious dealings instead of the typical bank robbery...
It might be a good way to show hint at the main villians.

Do you read a lot of Frank Miller by chance?