Your style is looking good however I think you need to work on your profiles and shadeing. Right now the base color alone looks flat and I think you need to jazz it up a bit. ^_^

The colors are grand and the presentation very crisp but I find that the art itself looks very similar to most Manga inspired works; Its not bad. Its well rendered but it may be worth trying to break from the "Manga-esque" and finding a different style one that catches peoples eyes apart from the colors.

For the kind of story you are telling, you have a very good artistic match!

However, I do have one point you should consider: the red-on-black lettering is hard to read. Either stick with black-on-white dialogue, or compensate by using larger font sizes and a paler tint of red for your letters when you use that color scheme.

I was reading through and I like the crime noir feel in a single panel, off the wall, comic, but what I find difficult is that what I read... its a bit too off the wall. Context needs to be developed. I actually like the ongoing strip posted in between updates more because it had a concise joke in an ongoing strip which continued. Memesink needs more context for the joke to work. The art is good and doesn't necessarily have to change.

The art is good, but the shading can be a little bit convolluted at times. The dialogue in the first page was also a bit redundant, though this may have been intentional. The panel flow can be a bit confusing at times.

Looking at The Pirate Terminators, I really like the camera angles you use. My only critique is that I saw a few framing issues as far as panel to panel transitions. It's nothing big, in fact very minuscule. It's only in a few scenes.

First off: I liked your art style, it is sleek.



I found your text a little small and hard to read. Your speech bubbles seemed big enough to contain bigger text.
Good comic. A little hard to read.

This is in reference to LOLZ since you have it in your sig. The writing is not bad, but I think you would actually have something more visually appealing if you hand drew your comic and scanned it. I like that you have good punctuation. Your simplicity belies your sophistication.

you have a lot of talking heads. Try to change up your angles and perspectives so every panel isnt just a head.

Your artworks unbelievably good. I truly love all your work.

marine
Your artworks unbelievably good. I truly love all your work.

It's not his artwork, Marine. Its some other guy...Tidwell is just the writer.

As for your comic, I think what holds people and my self back from truely enjoying your work is the the art work. It seems rushed and hap hazard. I know you can draw I have seen your work apart from penis but you never go for that...some may say it adds to the joke but I think it hinders it in a way. The comic is funny...don't get me wrong but I think you have more in you than what is being shown.

I ADORE your artwork. Really. It's simply amazing.

But I would change the font, or at least use a bigger size of it.
The text is a bit unclear in the speech bubbles.

Or then I'm just a blind bat.

I could say something similar about your comic, I love the art, with it's sepia-tones and Dave Mckean-ish, Kabuki-ish collage-y backgrounds. The sound effects look great hand-lettered but the typed dialogue looks a bit... slapped on, if that's the right expression? I like how the balloons flow, the text is just a bit jarring. Maybe switch to a more organic-looking font? Apart from that it's gorgeous!

marine
Your artworks unbelievably good. I truly love all your work.

as themidge said, it isnt my artwork, its Renzo Podesta's, he is the shit.

LSFP doesn't have enough pages.

Later,
Chip

What can I say, Your works are near flawless. The angles in the newest tier of Dead are not easily discerned as to what has transpired. May be a tier previous may help to account for the agle misinterpretation. But the confusion may be intetional. I love both Broken Things and Dead so finding fault is very hard. great work Chip!

Don't write your dialogue or soliloquy in color unless you want to bring specific attention to them. They're hard to read, and really brigh.

Use a darker shade of red on your background design. For example the swirly thing should be a duller purple so it actually looks like it's part of the picture. When you splash color in something thats otherwise black and white, it doesn't have to be especially bright, it will look brighter because of the lack of color of it's surroundings.

As long as I'm on page six, your hand in panel one is too rigid, it should bend a little at the wrist against the direction of the forearm, because when he's wiping off the glass the friction pulls his relaxed fingers the other way, unless he's purposely keeping his arm rigid while he wipes the glass, and thats just wierd.

Finally, save your files as png's not jpegs. jpegs have an automatic blurring affect to reduce file size when they save but png's remain crisp. Because you don't have alot of color it's not especially noticable, except around your fonts, which is the one place you really don't want it.

I looked at Children At Play, and here's my opinion.

The lettering (and especially the word balloons): since you are using your computer to letter, you should also use it to draw your balloons. Even if you use a mouse instead of a stylus, the better fit possible that way will make your work look better.

Yes, I understand that the strip is probably supposed to look like kids did it, but let the crayon backgrounds take care of that.

I really like your artwork, but think your word balloons should be done on computer as well as your text. Otherwise your comic is great and pretty funny.

Wow, beautiful artwork. O_O
The only things I would say is that you should resize your first page a little (it really stretched my screen) and try useing a different font. The one you have now it too plain for your art! ^_^

I'm not much of a manga person, but your art is pretty great. Awesome mall shot in your latest update. TERRIFIC coloring.

The art is an AWE!

..but ye might concider changing the font to a softer one.. I do like it, but with this comic it might be bit too harsh. Also, center your text in the balloon of the third page; now it's focused on the left side.
First page is too large a file IMO.

I've since fixed all of that stuff... check it out.

Neat style & a nice start.

Work on your depth, mass, and textures. Everything has a tendency to run together: foreground & background, animate & inanimate. The illustative capabilities are there. You just need to work out the important details more. Also, your storytelling is choppy. Give the reader more info to tie the panels & pages together.

Later,
Chip

I read your some of all your comics and the stuff i liked the best was all of the experimental(ish) art. I think your comics would be better if you embraced absurdity in your art style, and just went a little crazy. Make more cool looking abstract(ish) things.
(Really like the character design for the guy in Terran Sandz.

RobertTidwell

marine
Your artworks unbelievably good. I truly love all your work.

as themidge said, it isnt my artwork, its Renzo Podesta's, he is the shit.

How can I get him to draw penis? That'd be awesome.

uh...

uh...

Well...

That is... I mean...

I don't get your strip at all. Probably my bad.

So, uh, I got nothin' for you.

Sorry,
Chip

I started reading Dead and got addicted.

The comic is fanastic, I'd suggest either cutting back on the profanity a bit, since it comes off a bit forced at times (...since you said the character curse like this and is one of his talents, then ignore this =D) Another thing? I'd suggest changing the HTML template for Dead. The red is kinda distracting, it feels like this comic would be best read with an entirely black background and minimal HTML. It'll be awesome to see this comic in some sort of flash-type thing with sounds.

Terminals comics could use a little darkening up. Just play with the contrast/brightness levels and make it look inked. It'll make it easier to see with my burned and destroyed gamer eyes.

the jokes are random...I like random...as random goes...sometimes its good and sometimes its not...that's the problem with random...a comic needs consistentcy.
Also the drawings are funny but they seem to always be set against a white background as though floating in space...adding some color may resolve that. Also the 6 panel layout...this is consistent but change it up...maybe a one panel or varying sizes of panels or etc...you know what I mean. When the joke is good is good its good. the art and layout will push it over the limit.


one last thing. what is with the long author's notes?