I have a hard time writing the short description because English is the second language and I'm not good at writing a cool word....

I need some help...How can I write a good short description???

For Example,I started new comic named "30 Years"...

http://www.drunkduck.com/30_Years/index.php?p=604701
I have a hard time writing the short description because it's about Gwang Ju massacre which no one really know here and it's about Former South Korean Dictator who was responsible for massacre(I guess it's a dictator tradition to do that) But he's still alive and he's living inside his home happily playing golf.

So 30 Years pass after the massacre and the dictador is still living happily but Sons and daughter of the victim are here for the revenge...


No one watch this and I'm wondering what is the good way to write a short description????

You can use this:

Former dictator of South Korea survive the massacre Gwan Ju. No one know of it; secretive and unknown. Sometimes plays golf in a happy home. His son and his daughter seek revenge. 30 years, they make battle with him for the soul of the father's victim. Read for great constipation.

humorman
You can use this:

Former dictator of South Korea survive the massacre Gwan Ju. No one know of it; secretive and unknown. Sometimes plays golf in a happy home. His son and his daughter seek revenge. 30 years, they make battle with him for the soul of the father's victim. Read for great constipation.

Well,It's not a secret...And the dictador really exist...
They don't know lot about this because they simply "Forgot" what happened there...

The real photo


The Dictador

The massacre


Interveiw from the western reporter
http://www.tagstory.com/video/video_post.aspx?media_id=V000073524





Photo from the movie "Elaborate Vacation"



Movie trailer
http://www.tagstory.com/video/video_post.aspx?media_id=V000060460







All the historical event is true.But the revenge is,Unfortunately,Fake...

Don't use Humorman's, he's trying to make a joke at the expense of your English.

Short descriptions are usually a bit dramatic and tell enough of the story to get someone interested. It's what I try to do when I feature a comic. I think you pretty much have a short description already, from what you wrote. It just needs to be cleaned up a little.

The Gwang Ju Massacre (a real event) was caused by a former South Korean dictator, who went unpunished and is still alive, happy, and playing golf 30 years later. But now the sons and daughter of the victims are here for their revenge...

skoolmunkee
Don't use Humorman's, he's trying to make a joke at the expense of your English.

Short descriptions are usually a bit dramatic and tell enough of the story to get someone interested. It's what I try to do when I feature a comic. I think you pretty much have a short description already, from what you wrote. It just needs to be cleaned up a little.

The Gwang Ju Massacre (a real event) was caused by a former South Korean dictator, who went unpunished and is still alive, happy, and playing golf 30 years later. But now the sons and daughter of the victims are here for their revenge...

Thanks!!!