Chimera's got 3 solid reviews, and lol comics doesn't exist, so we're moving on to Thunder Roarer.

http://www.drunkduck.com/Thunder_Roarer/index.php

I'm sorry, but this comic is kind of a mess.

What do you have against backgrounds? Or the human form? All the backgrounds ever are are loose looking hills sometimes with trees on them. Or sometimes there's trees in the background. Most of the time, however, there's nothing. Simply nothing.

The inking is messy and disorgnaized. The characters in frontal view have ectremely long spaces beteen their eyes and their mouths. In profile the head is too long and flat. However the thing that throws me off about the art is that these animals you draw don't looks all that bad. These 'Thunder Roarer' things or whatever. But the messy and disorganized inking that you do obscures these creatures.

My thoughts on this comic are to stop whatever 'style' you're doing here and just work on figuring out what the human body looks like first. And ink cleaner and don't do all these washes. And backgrounds. You need better, more intricate backgrounds. Make sure you have knowledge of perspective for that. And finally, after doing all of that, get a better font off of www.blambot.com

That's all.

I would have to agree here.

I think you could have a really good comic going on here if you just cleaned up the look some more.
I think you have some really excellent character designs going on, but... it looks like it was done in pencil with no inking at all.. which can make for a messy look if you don't know how to do it correctly.

I think you should seriously download/ or buy an picture progam.. something like photoshop (you can pm me about how to get it), or any other more legal progam that allows for layers. something like gimp.
so that you can layer over your comic pages that you scan in, then trace in a darker lines and everything to give it a inked, cleaner look. and also using photoshop/ or other progams that allows for customable brushes and shapes you could easily create really good backgrounds, to give the readers an feel of the world that the people live in.

as for the story..
I like this story.. very oringal. however, at times the text is very hard to read.
you might think about going over the some of the chapters/pages and redoing them.

I don't have time to read through the archive right now, but I looked at several from across the whole span. The plot looks interesting, so I would like to come back and read the whole thing some time.

The art looks like you do it very fast, and with a sloppy kind of brush-pen...? I think it would improve your comic a lot if you had straighter, more solid panelling to support the fluid characters.

I really like the animals. It looks like you have a strong grasp on their anatomy and whatnot, unlike the humans. If the quality of the animals wasn't so much higher, the humans alone wouldn't look as out-of-place and poor, but they do. I would suggest some serious work on human anatomy, and your work will improve, almost subconsciously.

Otherwise, I kind of like the messy feel, and I do intend to read the story sometime. Also, good work on actually going so far with it! That in itself is worth something.

What sad reviews. Half of you didn't even read all the story. :(

The art feels more like you are doing an art piece more than a solid boxed panel comic. Which is why the filler art and large panels seem to be more skilled. (Painting detail in small areas is hard.)

You're directing skills are good. What is needed to be shown to tell the story is there in each panel.

With the human anatomy, at least you are not avoiding drawing hands or making talking heads. You try many different poses to get the feeling the moment. The face style makes me think of Native American art. I forgot the artist's name, but makes me think of it. (The large noses, high cheekbones and simplified bodies.)

The backgrounds don't feel too off. They are very simplified yet they have distance to them. I especially like the mountain ranges.

I really like the story telling skills to this. Two different stories at once. It is clever how the author switches between both times. The story is unique. Two half-breeds that relate to each other, suffer together yet one doesn’t continue to live on with the other. It’s such a personal story of how to live on when one close to you passes on.

Critiques: I personally would consider having better defined dialogue bubbles to be a real good improvement. Just make the dialogue bubble in waterproof pen or ballpoint. Change small things overtime for improvement.

hmn. Maybe it's just me who thinks that people can draw the human form in different ways. Okay, it's not photographic. But most comics aren't. I think what might put people off is that it's *almost* but not *quite* right. So, maybe a bit more practice. And like the person above me said, at least you're trying with it.
I also don't mind the 'mess' of the art. I think it's unique. Not all comics have to be clones of each other, and it looks interesting. But, I would recommend that you come up with a better way to add text to your art work. How you have it now looks messy, and just... jarring.

Jillyfoo
What sad reviews. Half of you didn't even read all the story. :(

I did read all of the story, just so you know.

thats just I'm still not a fan of that messy style.

and plus like thundra said... the text usage makes it look even more messy and jarring.
I can't even read half of what it said.

I love the story, and the idea... but... he could had done it in a better manner, you know?
at least he could do is redo the pages with the diffcult to read text so that the text pops out better and is easy to read.
then it wouldn't matter so much about the art, people would certainly come back for the story and the characters.