Oh comics! You just never stop!

NEVER.

http://thepuresoul.smackjeeves.com/

Okay, so the premise of this comic is a bit cliche. A guy with the face of a girl. Almost like crossdressing. So he's cursed. And he has to get un-cursed. Which I don't understand, since he could probably score some lesbians with that face (kidding).

Anyway, the characters in this comic aren't the most well developed ever, but it's an enjoyable read. It doesn't try to be overly manga-ish, but it still has a lot of elements of manga art. The art also could use some tightening up. It work to an extent, but more time spent on each page as well as more backgrounds and open pannel layouts could help. Facial features could also be improved to look less sloppy.

My favorite character is the medicine guy for some reason. I always think he'll reveal himself to be awesomely powerful at some point, but maybe not. The cursed kid reminds me of Ed from Full Metal Alchemist, but more slapstick. And the girl...not sure what she reminds me of. Her character needs to be fleshed out a little to be discernable. I can guess at her character type though as a person who acts easy going and powerful but has some problems.

So overall tighten up the art, flesh out the world that they're in, work on backgrounds, maybe vary the line width a bit...that kind of stuff. The story is pretty good so far though aside from some cliches.

I've read this comic a long while ago, but I'll still review it anyway:

The art is ok. I can only really describe it as "blocky," so things don't look all that natural. It's also very sparse and lacking detail that could make it much more interesting and enjoyable to read (which does begin to happen as the story goes on). However, proportions are done pretty well, despite the fact that the characters sometimes have very long necks, which almost give them the effect of looking like a giraffe. More in-depth shading would also help, because otherwise the comic looks kind of bland without it (which also happens as the comic goes on).

Backgrounds are sorely needed, especially during the action scenes. I usually only see them when characters are making dramatic poses or such.

The writing is ok. The intro needs some work, since it just jolts the reader right into the story. Sudden entrances can work for some comics, but this one just didn't work all that well. But I generally liked the story well enough to read through it and was pretty entertained.

The dialogue is good, it has proper grammar and puncuation and the likes. However there are parts of the dialogue that bugged me, like this page . "There's someone I have to find... and there's something I have to do." So... cliche. Cliche's are fine if they're done right, but that really turned me off from the story. Part of it is from making that sentence so dramatic.

Generally, I like this comic. It has an intriguing enough story, but lots of area to improve.

Well, the comic's backgrounds aren't great, but they're alright. And I think the thing that really made the comic for me was the paneling. It's not amazing or anything, but it does work. Such as on this page.

Ah, but basically from this fight scene (which incorporates pages after it and such) there were no backgrounds. Also, with the last panel on this page the background is mostly black. It took me a while to figure out that it was a pull-out camera angle from the tree-tops. That needs some detail, not just black trees, considering how important and dramatic that action is for that panel.

I agree though, the backgrounds are good... when they're there.

Yeah that is a weakness. I also read this a while ago so I didn't remeber the pages and pages without backgrounds...that's a problem.

I like this comic.

The story is very much a typical shonen cursed story. But in the later parts(before DD got shut down) there was some things that were revealed and different then expected. The demon girl and medical man have yet to reveal more about their characters. All in all I really like the flow of the story and dispite the simple backgrounds I at least know what's going on.

The only thing that bugs me about the art style is the longness of the necks. There should be more referance taking on drawing necks.

One thing about the anatomy is you shouldn't try to hide it so much behind clothing(especially with the main character). Draw the body then the clothing. It'll make it look better.

Hmm, yeah... some of the things I was going to point out in this comic have already been covered... but on a side of personal preference, I think it'd greatly aid the story to have some colour, I can see the artist has already gone to the effort to do shading and highlights, which I find actually takes longer than adding colour anyways.

There are some good action scenes in this, with decent poses most of the time... but at other times there are some issues with the proportions of the characters and the way their limbs bend. For example, this page details both http://thepuresoul.smackjeeves.com/comics/18355/ ... where the proportions for the monster getting slammed to the ground look pretty darn good, but then the demon girl's arms in the final frame look a tad off in comparison.

Also in this page http://thepuresoul.smackjeeves.com/comics/18363/ ... the last frame, the guy on the far left looks fine with his proportions, but the girl's arm seems too long from the point past the elbow.

The drawing of the special effects are also well represented for the most part, but they too seem to be screaming out for some colour... however it really is a bit of a personal preference issue too.

All in all, not a bad story, and some interesting characters... but it does seem to be a mixed bag, with some issues that I'm sure can be sorted out with a bit of concentrating on those areas! (i.e. the necks, proportions, some of the background work, the other issues mentioned above)