Oh yeah.

http://www.drunkduck.com/The_one_named_Wingless

Manga. Too bad I`m not into that stuff anymore. Such a shame. Let`s get this rabbit killer to review a manga!

The one named Wingless by ichigohikaru

Now let`s see, this is a pretty comic. Something you would see ranked high in the manga section of onlinecomics.net. The art looks and feel manga. Yeah, son. Anyways, moving on. The characters show emotion. yeah, the emotions are well done, a bit overexaggerated, yeah. But of course it`s manga. So that`s okay. Yeah. Backgrounds pop up sometimes, okay well one time. When a background shows up, it does it`s job (aside from Karsa Town). Not that eye catching, not that distraction. It does it`s job. Like a Micheal Bay movie in the middle of summer. Yeah.

Now the story. From what I can tell, centers around this guy (typical shojo dude, cool, calm, cute. etc) called Wingless. What a weird name. and his friend Ichrio, a sorta clumsy dude (That hasn`t been done before :roll: ) who go around doing jobs. Okay. That`s cool an all. Yeah. The story flows well. The dialogue give character to the characters, it works. You can read though this quite fast, maybe it flows well? Maybe it`s low on dialogue. Whatever.

While reading this. I couldn`t help but feel that this entire concept has been done before, not one time, not two, but hundreds of times. It`s a feeling that you can`t escape. The characters, the way they act, the story, everything. And if your like me, jaded with manga. Then that`s gonna be a down point. But still it`s a good read, if your bored or something.

myxomatosis`s final score: B-

.: Myxomatosis :.

Alrighty let's see here. Well I'm a big fan of 2 things:
Backgrounds, to ground a characters in reality, and
A semi-visually appealing style.

You've got that semi-visually appealing style thing going. I mean, it's not bad. All these characters might have mullets, but it's not a BAD thing. I do feel sorry for anybody who would have to animate this comic if it actually came out in Japan though. They have no backgrounds to go by! Where are these characters?

Oh god, you're using emoticons...oy..oy...oy...okay, just passing through that...

Okay, so now I get that they're in some sort of desert. Of some sort.

Oh wait, this is real 'manga-ish' which means I'm supposed to be reading it from right to left. Whoops. No wonder that action sequence made no sense.

Covering long lines of dialogue with a black page with words in different fonts on it? LAZY. Plus that really messes up the flow. But I guess if you want to cover something quick and don't mind messing up the flow in order to draw less talking then I'll go with that...still it contributes to this comic seeming like an amature comic.

Okay, so overall this comic is fairly so-so. I could tell where the characters were due to some minor backgrounds, but you left a lot of it up to imagination. Whatever, I'll go with that. You use terms which seem to be sorta fleshed out and will probably continue to be explained, so I guess that's okay, but your characters are really cliche. I mean REALLY. The only defining characteristic that seperates onr characters from other characters is the skin 'tone' or weather they're male or female. And their personalities really haven't had enough time to make themselves clear to us. But keep it up. You'll improve.

I'm not reviewing it. Someone else, please. I'm tired.

(I write my reviews without reading the others, sorry if I sound repetitive)

It's a little early to say anything about plot, there hasn't been enough time. The dialogue would flow all right if it was run through a spelling and grammar check. There are run-on sentences and misused words (such as your instead of you're) and it all disrupts the voice of the characters. It reminds me that I'm just reading a comic, I'm not absorbed in the story.

Sometimes it feels like the artist is rushing to give us information. There is a note on Page 6 telling us what a Usrid is - a piece of information that could just have easily been worked in as an offhand comment in the dialogue. It's the same way with Page 15 - all dialogue and no pictures. It worked in the prologue, a moment of extreme drama, but this is just a regular conversation. It adds to the overall rushed feel of the comic.

The rushing is also in the artwork - the lineart as for shape is all right, and the shading Wingless uses gives it a little atmosphere. The actual lettering, the speech bubbles, is very nice. But once again, I find the comic disrupted by the artist's mistakes. There will be tiny pieces of the picture that have not been filled by the tones, lines that don't stop where they should - it makes the pages look messy and hard to make out. Where there should be straight lines, like the city scene on Page 13, they are shaky. It looks like the lines were hand-drawn and tones were added digitally. Most digital editing programs have a line tool. Maybe the artist would be better off adding the backgrounds digitally, or at least use a ruler when drawing the buildings. I find myself having to look at the page for a while to understand what is happening. The few panels that were in color, however, were very clear to me, and they did not feel rushed. They were the highlights of the comic.

Overall, I feel that Wingless could make an OK comic if more time and care was given to the pages. Honestly, I'm not hooked or even intrigued. There's nothing new or interesting in the opening pages, and not enough of the story to be absorbed in the plot yet - and without that, not enough to put up with the tangled artwork.