The Legends

Set 3 years in the future. The murder of a prominent New Carolina superhero named Heavenchild brings 5 heroes together. Led by a mysterious man named "The Gunslinger", these vigilantes are the only ones keeping New Carolina safe.

The legends

Art
It would be very easy to say terrible, in many ways it is but the creator is young and improving. Poor visuals can turn people of comic quick but at the same time we all need to start somewhere.
The MS paint visuals are not appealing and very pixelated, this is fixed in the later pages though.
The line art is very basic but shows attempts at anatomy and perspective and does improve slightly, the main improvement is the cleaning up of pixels and the colouring.
The latest pages has come a long way in the colouring department, and hopefully the rest will follow suit.

The writing.
It all whips along at a fair pace and has a cheesy charm to it but lacks any real sense of danger or threat. The characters seem pretty basic at the moment but there is time for development as the story has barely gotten underway.
The dialogue is pretty poor to be honest, while it does the job it is often clunky and there are some very big mistakes.

Overall
It isn't a good comic... yet. Despite the lack of original ideas clunky dialogue and simple line art it still shows a little promise. This is helped by the fact the creator actively seeks critique and to improve.

Art - 2/5

The art is... pretty bad. The artist seems interested in improving, and it does so, slightly, later on, but it's still pretty bad.
The posing is very stiff and jagged, and everything has the taint of MSpaint on it, even when he switches to another program. It's really distracting.


Writing - 3/5

The plot so far isn't far enough in for me to say much about, except that it sounds pretty generic so far. I'll give it an extra point for the sake of being too early in to judge properly.
As for the dialogue, hoo boy. The author could probably benefit from a thesaurus and a spellcheck or two. Often the dialogue is cheesy or redundant, explaining things in places almost like it was an afterthought.


Characters - 2/5

Every character introduced so far is a generic superhero stereotype. You've got the karate orphan raised by a ninja, the super-special mutant with powers that she has to learn to control (also an orphan, but raised by a furry), and a cop turned vigilante. Nothing really special or unique here. There's nothing done to make them interesting or worth trying to remember, even their costumes are pretty generic.


Conclusion - 4/10

It's pretty bad right now, but not irredeemably so. If the author improves his art or writing a bit, it would be a readable (though very generic) story, but for now it's in need of some serious work.

Art
I like the bright colors and clear lines. It makes the pages easier to read and understand. But, as others have said, it is seriously lacking in other ways. The drawings are simple and jagged, and often awkward when it comes to movement and action. I don't think there's anything wrong with simplicity, pixels, and bright colors, but the author needs to work on basic anatomy, perspective, composition, and other drawing skills first. I don't like the blurred shading that is irregularly used, either.

I liked the author's avatar a lot before reading the comic, so I expected more. I think the character used in his avatar generally looks a lot better than the others. There was one frame, when Anna kisses him, that was surprisingly high quality, so the author is improving and capable of better.

Story
I had trouble following who was talking and what was going on as the story jumps all around. It took me awhile to figure out that the color of the box determines whose inner monologue it is. I like that idea a lot, but its confusing as it is implemented now, because the main character changes erratically and frequently.

Characters
I don't feel much for the characters or have a sense of their personality. Are they all friends? Where did they come from? How did they get their powers?

Overall, the comic is lacking. But, if it was drawn a little better, and had a more clear storyline, I might like it a lot more.



In terms of concrete tips for improvement, I'd like to see more detail in the characters and backgrounds, and more time spent on poses. I think a bigger "comic" font would make it easier to read. Last, mixing up the size and shape of the panels might make it more interesting, too.

Thanks for the review guys. I'll work on the art and writing and try to make the comic a little more original.

ART: I don't really know if the art's improved with the newer updates, but some panels certainly had more effort into them than others. As most artists would tell you, getting a book on anatomy study would go a long way. The art's simple enough that it's not an eye-sore, though.

WRITING: The dialogue goes from serious to casual all too quickly, in my opinion. The silliness of some of the writing I think undermines what I think could be a comic that readers could take a little more seriously. Introducing too many characters too soon means that the readers won't be all that invested in whoever the main character(s) is/are, unless you have sufficient backstory, albeit backstory that isn't cliched.

The overall comic has potential, but the artist would have to make plenty of changes.