Summer!

http://www.drunkduck.com/Rasvaar/

Okay...this is a comic about a gay...anthro...thing.

Alright, so that's kinda weird. I wouldn't be reading this comic if it weren't up for review because, frankly, I'm not a huge fan of either anthro or homosexuality. But whatever. Let's see what's here...

I'm not gonna comment much on the story. It flows well but it's also sorta weird that they just decide to leave town in this truck and the truck is driving for 3 days straight. Arwise you almost never use establishing shots. A lot of imagination is necessary to figure out where the characters are. However you do a pretty good job of drawing the characters.


Final Thoughts- This comic kinda creeps me out. However the drawings aren't bad. I'm not sure why you only use blue though. Maybe that's just part of the style or something.

Ok..well.. I'm also not usually into anthro stuff but I am into homosexuality. So it all kinda evens out.

I actually like this comic. I can look past the fact that all the characters have huge snouts and appreciate how nicely things are layed out, the consistent style and the extremely better than average writing.

I just kinda wish there was some backstory on all the main characters, cause in the beginning I feel like I'm just getting thrown into a story already in progress.

Review time!

ARTWORK - not bad. i dont read any anthro stuff but, in theory, its fine and you do a fine job with the color pages. the blue pencil pages look too rough for me and are a bit distracting. still, the colored pages show me that, if you probably had more time, you could produce some visually pleasing pages. sometimes, the layout (i.e. panel placement, etc) was pretty chaotic. it was all over the place causing me to reread wondering if i was following the story/dialogue in the right order. rule #14 - don't make your readers work too hard to enjoy your comic.

WRITING - actually pretty good. i was pleasantly surprised to be honest. there's hardly any backstory but you've done a good job of establishing the characters right off the bat and that's important. the dialogue reads well and the jokes/gags are pretty funny.

OVERALL - probably your subject matter - gay anthros - will keep a lot of people away. but i would assume you're writing for you and those people who are interested in the gay lifestyle. so while you may never have the most popular comic on DD, you may build a loyal fanbase nonetheless. my advice - write what you want, no matter how many people read it, and clean up the artwork and layout some. consider putting the time into all color pages, as well.

best of luck!

Art: Art is really awesome. I like how each character acts visually and just the general look of the characters. I'm not too much into the color look, but when you do it, it looks good. My only complain was that everything was blue, which to me gives the impression that the comic isn't finished, as if you were going to ink the drawings or something. But, the characters are clear and easy to see. Also, on Rasvaar's face he has a black triangle for the nose and one next to that which looks to be on the side of the face. I got a little confused if that was just a black spot or if it was a nostril, if it is the former then all is good, if it is the latter then it looks weird.
I giggled outloud on the second page when we find out that Rasvaar is gay, that face he makes when they tell the little sister. Very cute, and you do some of those faces in some of the comics. Great job on facial expression.
You should really look into more use of backgrounds. There are a lot of panels intermingled in your comic that have nothing in the background and it sort of leaves this big blank white area that detracts from the visual of the comic. Just something simplistic would do fine I think.

Story: Excellent story. I have no problem with homosexuals at all, and in fact I'm glad that more people are writing about them. It's actually a cute little story, cliche because the concept has been done before (gay child who doesn't want to tell his parents for fear of their reaction), but the three main characters are very memorable and well drawn. They each have a distinct personality, and I really started to get attached to the characters. Which is good. Good praise here.
Since I have no idea when you plan to get to some sort of stop/ending point I can't say much about the ending or the pace of the story. It seems to flow very well in this connected yet separated style. Each page is connected, but at the same time is sort of individual. Hard to explain I think.

Writing: Font was a big problem. I know it is hand drawn, but I would much rather prefer some sort of comic font, and there are many out there that can at least give a semi-handdrawn-look. Also, all the speech bubbles really need to be drawn better. They are just weirdly shaped sometimes, and you could easily do them with photoshop or even with MS Paint if you wanted to. That's my recommendation on that.
I don't recall any spelling errors, and grammar for the most part seemed good. Sometimes it got a little wonky, but at least you were consistent.

Overall: Great comic. What more can I say without making it seem like I've attached my lips to the tooshy of the author? I loved the art style, the story, and the characters. It has great potential.

I must say that I haven't reviewed much lately, and that is because I haven't had much good to say, but this comic is different. The germ is here for a really good comic. The art is quirky but consistent and most of all easily read. The characters are well defined ( so well that you recognize them even in drag ) and the expressions are good. The story feels like a roadmovie and the gags are fitting. I liked the goth episode a lot.
What I don't like:
Stop with the blue lines, ink the comic in black or color the whole thing. Don't try to hide the artwork in some blurry blue inbetween thing.
Get a ruler and do some decent page layouts. Clean up your speechbubbles and lettering. Do more establing shots. At the beginning of a new episode, show us where we are.
That's it. This could be a great comic if the artist wasn't so lazy - but I still think it is a good comic.

I thought this comic was very good. Reading some of the pervious reviews, my mind, perverted as it is, immediately thought it'd be some furry yaoi-fest. But I was happily proven wrong.

The dialogue's very good in this one. Things flow very easily. This one in particular made me laugh - you could really see the train-wreck coming. Watching Rasvaar and the rest travel, you definitely get a feel fro the characters, even though there's no real backstory behind them as yet. When Rasvaar and Xavier were on the bed, there was a very "aww" moment. Quite a few of those.

Heh..."Mr. Crazy Lady."

When you actually used colour for a few strips, it worked - although the 'all-blue' thing you've got going on is pretty unique. The anthro style, I don't know much about, but you seem to be going about it pretty well, with realistic proportions and such. Although the text placing in this one was a bit awkward, you generally do okay in the text department. Entering text in Photoshop or somesuch would probably help.

CONCLUSION!: Although some people will invetably be turned off by the homosexual anthro theme, it's a great story. The characters are likeable - you really get to know them. Nice work.

Oh wow, I totally forgot this was here.

Hm, interesting and helpful stuff.

Looking at this I think it's safe to say I definately DO need more establishing shots, background and what have you. Sorry about that, I've just gotten into the habit of avoiding those things because I suck at them. But from now on I will endever to have some form of scenery.

Speechbubbles and font, I shall work on that and neaten it up, as well as the page layout.

Hm, I understand what you're all saying, about it being a cliche because he's a gay dude who doesn't want his parents to know, but I'd like to think there aren't too many stories where people hitch-hike away from their fears.

I'm in two minds about the blue. I like it because it's different to a lot of comics, but lately I've been thinking of going to black inks or something. Perhaps if I did some colour pages and then followed that with black inked pages? And see how people go with that.

And someone mentioned big snouts. Yeeeaaaah, there's a lot of that. I need to tone them down and make them look more like muzzles that would actually go with whatever species the character is. I don't want to just jump into a redesign and lose everyone, and announcing the redesign rubs wrong with me, so I'll work on that sloooowly.

The backstory thing; yes they have backstories, and as the story continues you'll find out more about them. And the beginning was very sudden and you know nothing about them and all that jazz. But I like to think it's like life. When you meet someone, you don't know everything about them, but in time you'll learn more, which is the same with my comic. So yeah, you'll all find out more.

Driving in a truck for three days straight is weird yes, but I read somewhere that lots of truckies have to stay awake for days and make fast trips. I think the focus of what I was reading was on the whole uppers and downers thing. Plus, it's a comic, weird things happen.

And yay, my writing rocks! Lol, sorry, I just gotta enjoy that part. :)

Thanks for all the feedback, it was incredibly helpful, now I know what to do to improve it.