Damn it people.

Hustle!

http://www.drunkduck.com/Four_Bats/

Art: As this is pretty much a sprite comic, I can't quite comment on the artstyle since it isn't really all original. For the most part you've placed the characters in the panels well, and you do have good backgrounds. One problem I see is that everything seems warn out because you only use that one perspective from a wide view. I would try to work in some closeup stuff or differen't viewpoints. Don't overuse your backgrounds. That one for the good guys home gets way overused and mixed in with the lack of alternate perspectives it gets really dull visually. Trying to incorporate shadows would also greatly affect the look of the comic. I'd recommend looking at the most successful sprite comics (8 Bit, etc.) and see what sorts of things they do visually, and then try to do some of that in yours.

Story: I'm a little impartial about the actual story. I found some of the jokes lacking and not quite funny (mostly just the ones about halo and some of the bacon ones). Killer Robot was interesting, though I can't say that I was overly interesting in the storylines as I was about how the characters were interact.

Writing: Mostly the writing is clean and grammatically correct. Personally I don't like the use of internet slang or anything like that, and you did use a few reduced words that sort of bugged me. Mostly though it is just plain clean.

Overall: Needs some work, and really with it being a sprite comic you should be doing a lot more to it. Battling against the greats like 8 Bit, etc. it is going to be hard to get the respect you deserve. Most people dismiss sprite comics these days because too many people do them. Just work on it. You've got the ground work laid out, just get creative with it.

Thanks for the feedback guys. Could you give me a few examples too? One that you particularly liked/didn't like, where I used shortened language or bacon jokes, etc.

I tried giving Yellow yellow text but it was too hard to read on a white speech bubble. I'll try to work on the good guy house background thing.

Alright, let's start with the good first: Your speech bubbles are readable to the extent that I know who's talking. this page was kinda funny. Your comedic pauses aren't bad either. Also, for a sprite comic this isn't bad. The words are readable and and punchlines are sometimes funny. However...

The Bad:
All the characters are extremely flat. No facial expressions obviously. Everything is always from one solitary camera angle. Although the jokes aren't bad, they aren't great either. It gets repetitive.

Overall there's not much I can tell you. The premise you've set up for yourself is limiting. I'm sure some people will like it but I'm not a fan of sprite
comics overall, and I'm not too into this.

Could only make it to issue #7 before dying out. How many pages does it take to make a freaking killer robot?

Art: no facial expressions. That's a real bummer. There is some red on the cheeks attempting to be... an open mouth? (the mouth isn't on the cheek dude.) Also light colored font is hard to read. Make it darker.

Story: spite 4 swords Zelda except with bat people and much more dull...