I was half inspired by the GTA 4 concept art, for this. And I feel like doing a series. This is my first one, and something feels off.

I don't know if it's because I'm not used to working without black lineart. Or the contrast between her skin tone and the black. Or something else.

It looks really cool to me. :)

Try flipping/mirroring it in whatever art-program you're using - it might be that it it's skewed too far to one side.

To me, it looks as if her head is too narrow; there should be more mass to the back of her head, because it's not just hair - there's a skull beneath it, too.

Otherwise, it looks really good. I like the combination of detailed character/stylised background. :)

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To me, it looks as if her head is too narrow; there should be more mass to the back of her head, because it's not just hair - there's a skull beneath it, too.

somebody already mentioned that to me, I'm slowly working towards it.

So far I've done a bit more too it.

Nice, I doubt I could do it better.
The one thing that seems a bit off to me is the neck, it looks very thin and a bit too much to the right.
I hope that helped, good luck with it.

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The top one reminds me of Pixie. ^_^

Great drawing.
I know what you mean... the head does not seem to exist behind the hair.
Possible if you moved the highlighted strip to the right a bit more?
About where the dark strip is?
It may bring the hair 'forward'?

The second image - it looks like the right eye is a little off - like it's not lined up right with the face; the perspective is just a little wonky there. I'd raise it more, if that's possible. It might disappear under the hair more, but the face will look better.

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I disagree,
I'd say the left (character's right) eye is in need of a little adjustment, it seems at an unnatural angle on the face, perhaps bring it down a little...
That said, these pictures exhibit alot more drawing talent than certainly I possess.
Good work!
:)