Hi everybody, i'm not too good at all that colouring stuff so i just do my comics in good old fashioned black and white. In fact I don't consider myself to excell in any area of comic books - just ok. But I do hope that my stories stand out, so if you're interested check out my comic "Headhunter". I would love to hear your views on it (good or bad) as i like to say "any criticism is good criticism" thanks for your time....Freeway

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yer clearly developing your own style and you've got some good talent. yer proportions are just a bit off.
and dont worry, lot of us dont get critiques right away, just keep trying.

nice one Pit Face, thank you for your time and just as importantly - your honesty.

hmmm. interesting.

+PROS
#The writing is excellent.

# I love the way your panels aren't the straight forward box.

#You have a lovely variety of angles, just like a filmmaker

#Your characters are all very unique.

-Things to work on

#Sometimes the art doesn't do the writing justice.
It seems to lack the attention to details as your words.

#Craftmanship- Some of the images look a little grainy. When you scan artwork a lot of time you can see little marks and whatnot. Slight digital editing with the most basic of programs will fix this. Since this is a b&w comic i would suggest changing the mode to grayscale (there seems to be color noise) And then i would adjust levels, gamma, brightness contrast.

#I'm not sure why but sometimes it looks chopped, skewed, and again...grainy.

# Emotion, your story seems like it could be really powerful. But i just don't see enough emotion. I think this is more of a factor in the art, since people read faces a lot of times for a feeling. If my mother killed herself i would react a lot stronger then your character did. You should really push whatever you think would happen, even if it's not a drama. Maybe you should take more notes on the art in your script. I think that might help.

wow. that's fantastic. Sometimes it's nice to hear what's wrong with my comics, so i can try and come back and do a bit better next time. So thank you - mishi hime you have clearly given my comic some thought and given me a lot to chew over there, especially as i have one eye on starting up the 2nd instalment of that comic. So your comments will come in very useful and can only help me and my comics get better. So thanks again for your time and as ever your honesty.

your welcome. everyone i knows tells me i'm honest to a fault.
It's hard to see your own work and what's wrong with it so all my comments are always intended to help. I don't doubt that your script is wonderful freeway, but i look forward to seeing your improved art. best of luck. i'll check back on your story later once the later chapters are up.

I have coloured in the front cover of the 1st Headhunter now and have started work on the 2nd story which will be in colour throughout.

Another page is up folks !