I haven't been around since a while. Anyway, I've started posting the translations of my latest comic, "NOOB".

"NOOB" is based on Argentum OnLine, a MMORPG created in my country, Argentina. It's the story of one Pro character (Nitrus Pro) as he meets Fate when a couple of Newbies (Newberey and Magalí get in his life.

The actual comic already finished Chapter 2, but that's in spanish. I'm translating the comic slowly, trying to assure one new page every Monday and Friday.

I'd like to hear critics (good ones or, even better, constructive ones) about this new work of mine. I could use those for the third chapter, which I am plotting right now.

Thank you!

As a whole it's alright, but considering you already stated the final outcome on the first page it feels a little too predictable.

Well, only the first chapter is "predictable", simply because it's how the continuing story is going to develop. Chapter 2 (already finished in spanish) showed several twists and an unexpected ending that got fans of Argentum wanting more.

Thanks for the critic. :-)