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Jan 19,`09 2:50am | Quote |

Hi guys,

I'd love to hear any constructive criticism on how to improve my comic. There's very little so far, but I do have a pretty complete story planned out. After a few strips the main story will kick in.

It's about a private investigator and his partner milling around their agency until something really big eventually comes up. I don't want to give anything away, so yeah, I'd appreciate anything.

We Never Sleep

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Jan 19,`09 11:57am | Quote |

Well, ya can sleep when you're dead, right? It's really not enough to give much constructive criticism; But I'll give it a go.
The art is competent, and I think serves the characters well. The characters themselves seem likable. As far as the story- it seems to jump right in to the premise. Not sure whether that's a good or bad thing, but that first sequence with the city scape and narration on the first page doesn't seem to transition to the joke in the last panel very well. Hope there's some kind of twist- either with the plot or the characters- that separates it from your typical "odd couple detectives" story. That's all I got for all you've got. Make more pages and I'll check back.

 
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Jan 20,`09 12:16am | Quote |

Thank you very much for your input. Yeah, there's definitely not much yet, but they seem to take so long to make that you'd think there'd be more to show for it, haha. And yeah, I know what you mean about the first one. I must've read over it 50 times... Half the time it seems to flow, and the other half it seems too sudden and random. And I definitely do have a case in mind that hopefully will be kind of original.

And I really like your art style and shading..makes me wish for more of a natural gift in drawing, haha.

 
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Jan 20,`09 2:53am | Quote |

It seems alright but like your other comic there just isn't much there to say anything. But once you get more pages it should be interesting to see where it heads


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