oh my god, my eyes....


technically this comic is a mess. theres way too many effect and filters and stuff that makes my eyes cross themselves and swear to die. but for some reason i just...couldnt help but dig it a little. like when the main characters friend shows up at his house randomly in the skimpiest ass clothes i lol'ed.

however...this is supposed to be a yaoi? you couldve fooled me with the way you draw. theres nothing at all to imply that they have cocks. Now dont get me wrong I understand the feminine males that often appear in yaoi's, but you draw characters with feminine features, in girl clothes, with not even a bulge...im led to believe they are girls if you do that. at least give them a strong jaw or nose or SOMETHING!

the text looks like it was hack slashed onto the page. did you letter this in MS Paint?

final verdict: theres alot going on artistically, but not much substance. the same is true of the story.

3/10.

I-I didn't ask for a crit... But thankyou for taking the time to actually review it :3

Truth be told, this was drawn so long ago D: And for the first few pages, the one totally raped with the smudge/blur tool was in the body of a sexless mannquin (Augh, I don't think I got that across too well then meh... the joints, "Decay", missing limbs and no blood, bah, I tried D: )

And the main charactor is like... 13, hah ha, could 13 be considered Shota-age?

I dunno.

And yeah, the story sucks, but the first chapter is basically just for exposition of the other charactors and their relationship with the main char.

So no, it's not all that exciting.

But soon, yes soon, my tragic/romantic plot shall really begin BWAHAHAHA, BRING ON THE DEATH AND CREPPY PUPPET CHILDREN

MWAHAHAHAGHAHAHAHA AFSDFADGFASDGFASG

alright, I'm done :3

And thanks again (and yeah, manga studio hates me, so I had to do all the text in mspaint. But now I have Corel Painter, so things shall be better :3)

amefu,
Gosh! I didn't know what "yaoi" was, but now I do...I like the colorful logo and avatar you have. It would be really cool to see color like that in your comics.
hXc

oh snap, i didnt even see that...im sorry!

oh, no worries!! I like feedback, even if it's just to tell me I suck,