I liked it, and I think the pencil works in this case because you have the color there to help define it, and I liked the Pun Attack one which followed a kinda different format with the pop culture reference as a punchline in the last line and the "PUNchline" in the first. It had more of a setup, punchline, setup, punchline kinda cadence to it which was neat.
i've been experimenting with the style recently, when my pencils are too messy to bother cleaning up i'll just tablet-ink it -- i dunno whether i like this look or not for the comic.
You're art style is really cute and the first page was really funny. XD
-Dante
thanks very much, glad it made you laugh :D
since i got to around ten pages now i thought i'd give this topic another bump up, since i haven't got many comments of late. so check it out please and lemme know whatchoo think :3