I've started a romantic comic set in a Catholic School. Its updated every Friday. Please take a look and tell me what you think. Its rated M. So far nothing of any real worth has happened but there will be some nudity, sexual content, religious content, and so forth.
The page that you have up right now has some solid line work, but would benefit from variation in the thickness of your inking lines. Currently, your characters get lost of the page and the black hair of your one character is what draws the eye.
Putting some bold, black shadows in the background may help to distinguish your characters from the background and establish depth. Also, I think that varying the thickness of your inking lines will help to draw the readers eye to your characters.
I like your character designs though, and look forward to future updates.
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