Just wanted people to check out and give me critiques and contructive criticism towards my first comic, the story has just started, but if you keep, checking every tuesday (that's when I'll try to update), you'll see more of the ever expanding story and world of Eboe Terra. Now it has "furry" characters in it, but don't let that turn you away, I myself am not a fur, or anything like that, I just like how the characters looked that way. Please give it a chance, I bet you'll like it

your art is pretty good, the story hasnt started but might be good, and is of course enhanced by furries, FURRIES MAKE ANYTHING BETTER. as it has just started I can't say much else but I will say this:

I feel like saying things about avoiding cliches about "powerful" characters, I don't mean skillful, well trained or experienced characters, I mean characters who seem to be inherently stronger than others for no real reason, characters like this cheapen your story, when a character wins a fight, it should be because he was more skilled, better trained, better prepared or just plain lucky, a character Winning because they are "powerful" is cheap.

just a warning before you have your characters use a bunch of Deus ex machinas to escape battles.

Sorry, forgot to put the link on my original post, here it is http://www.drunkduck.com/The_Guardians_of_Eboe_Terra/

Mimarin thanks for the critique and suggestion, the suggestion actually helped me and my friend come up with some great story ideas, so simply, thank you.

Ah, you might want to try to draw some straighter lines, it isn't really a bad thing, it just makes things look more professional. Adding color, takes a lot of time so I applaud you on that, but you might want to add some shadows to make things look better, even just one layer of shadows or highlights might help. When the father is dead on the first page, did he die a silent death (being choked or what not) or was he slain? I don't know if you are against the 'using blood in a comic' thing, but even just a little bit would allow us to know he was murdered violently. Since there are only three pages, I can't really comment much on it. In the third page, I see there is a lack of background, which you might try to work on on the last two panels. Just adding a gradient colored background doesn't really help. Even just adding a background on the third panel might help. I love your art style though, the furries you draw pretty good, which I like -- just adding shadows and working more on your backgrounds would help a lot.

Art 6-7 - YOu have clean linearts, but you might try adding more shadows, you know to define the characters and even draw different camera angles on more dynamic panels, (but the only thing dynamic so far was the fight scene on page 1 and the death scene of the dad.... so, maybe that was your intention)
Story 4-5, Right now since there are not a lot of pages, I just see this story as a hero vs. villain. Hero is looking revenge for the death of a family member + gets his girl, but I don't know how it is really going to unfold.

Keep up the great work. =3

Thanks for the post, I'll try in the future to add some more backgrounds to it to give it a more dynamic feel to it, because the world of Eboe Terra is vast, and the shading thing was not really something i thought about too deeply because of time constraints on just completing the first few, I plan to use shading in my new pages in the future, because I want people to look favorably towards my story rather than passing it off as a cheap ass thrown together comic. I'll try not to rush myself in the future, but I make no promises, because school is fastly approaching, but I'll try harder to really make this comic shine above the rest.

Ah yes, school -- I removed my comic beceause of time constraints, but what I did is to do two chapters (at least the lineart) ahead of time so that even if school gets in the way, I wouldn't have much to do on each page later on. Yeah, you get a lot of anxiety waiting to put your stuff online, but in the end it will help one manage their comic better. ^^''

Your comic has some nice energy to it. You have nice-looking characters with contrasting personalities, and I like the color. Your art is pretty good, although the lack of fluid lines sorta keeps the art from looking better.

The story is pretty good. It gets the job done by being interesting throughout, and the light doses of humor works well. I would suggest that you do more than have just Kenjo and another character in each panel once you make future pages, because it would probably be more appealing if they had backgrounds and would actually relate to other panels. What you're doing now works, though...because I can still follow the story. But it could be better.

I give your comic a 7.5/10 for what it has so far.

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A good start. I like the Furries, I think you were right when you said that it added to the comic.

I am slightly put off by the classic sword-fight-adventure, but then it's too early to judge your comic too drastically. (As I must admit, there is such a thing as an incredibly good sword-fight-adventure) I shall drop by periodically to see how you are doing. Good job so far!! ^_______^