User: usedbooks
Fixed. Thanks. (When one writes and reads the text a few times, it's hard to catch typos by oneself...) QUOTE: I never found those "beauty marks" to be very beautiful personally. Me either, but I didn't just want to say "mole" in my description. Ironically, that mark wasn't part of the "beauty" of her design. I added it so she could be identified under her hood. QUOTE: And LOL at you making a fan service storyline for her XD I deny that! XD Seriously, though, I wrote that chapter to develop her relationship to Toyo and show more of her character (by which I mean personality). However, I emphasize internal character developments by using external/physical cues like changes of wardrobe or hairstyle (just look at the many kinds of younger Fudo's hair), so taking the cloak off was symbolic. QUOTE: it makes me wonder what they are doing now. Ack! You're in my head! I just wrote up my notes for the next character profile and I talk about that phenomenon in depth. o_0 -Posted on Apr 06, 2009

User: JustNoPoint		5
"secure her freedom and help to her get on her feet" Figured you may want to fix that sentence. See, I'm reading the WHOLE things carefully =D I feel you on the whole "can't reveal too much yet" that's why Fenny and Sally's profiles are so short. Most of their back stories have not yet been explored. I never found those "beauty marks" to be very beautiful personally. And LOL at you making a fan service storyline for her XD The thing about these profiles (since you don't kill off all your characters like someone else does) is that it makes me wonder what they are doing now. You tend to forget them as the story moves on. Then they pop back up and you're all like YAY! I remember them! So that's what they have been doing! -Posted on Apr 06, 2009