Issue 1-0 Page 8
JustNoPoint on March 24, 2010
Page 8 finally up. This time it has Kaida from Used Books making a cameo =D
Below is the old comment I made when I 1st made this page. You can also see the old page here
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Temporary page 8? And where have I been? This is SOOOoooo not Monday or Friday!!!
I have realized I was not ready to take on this comic yet in a full force capacity. To be honest there are still things in my head I'd like to flesh out just a bit more. And my pages are suffering a lot do to forcing myself to draw them for a schedule. I had this page practically finished by Friday night. It just needed some coloring. So I worked on it off and on each day to color and decided I can't be posting pages that look like this.
So I'm going to reboot and redraw...
...this page XD (no not the whole comic!)
This page doesn't have the impact that I want. The last page came out well but I was really excited to reveal Rick's power. I have to excite myself about my new story like I did in the Prologue. I have to hype myself up. I can't force it. I didn't have a schedule when I started the Prologue and it's pretty much like I'm starting over so I'm going to accept that it'll be bumpy again during updates. Meaning that my update schedule is officially being announced as "sporadic" =p
I know this isn't a good way to build an audience back up. But like DLP I'm looking ahead to when this can build people. I'm not good at starting comics XD I prefer it when they are already full steam rolling ahead and mapped out. So if everyone that reads can be a bit patient and stick around I bet I'll get back into this full force again before I know it when I don't feel I HAVE to do it and just WANT to do it again!
I will try to get at least a page out a week but if I don't I won't worry myself =p
usedbooks: That's how kids are! They can't just do things small they have to go over the edge!
DAJB: That was my biggest pet peeve in the Matrix movies. I hate slow motion in fight scenes. An occasional rewind slow down isn't bad if you need to see something really fast.
Tantz Aerine: Yep everyone can instead call him "The Blur" XD
Evil Emperor Nick: Yup. I figure most ppl generally think of super speed as like really REALLY fast. Not that running 70mph isn't fast... but it's pretty slow compared to most fast characters in comics.
kyupol: How'd you guess?! ;-)
amanda: Calm down! You get to play with him next!!!
mlai: Combine that with his dumbo ears for good measure! Wait, shouldn't that have been "inner hedgehog?"
Doctor Shadow: WOOT!
twistedrabbit: A lot different from the last time I remember you commenting in issue 1 of the Prologue isn't it ^_^
Abt_Nihil at 5:11AM, April 27, 2010
The changes are great, especially the shape and BGs of the 4th and 5th panel are extremely effective.
Meechi at 6:10PM, April 14, 2010
Hey JustNoPoint! As you can probably tell, I haven't been around much to know that you started working on DL. Your artwork seems to be improving. I see you've taken the time to work on perspective more. I'm really liking how this is starting out. Keep up the good work.
edbang at 7:45AM, April 12, 2010
Yeah... That's the stuff. I knew you didn't have to do a complete redraw. Better clouds, better textures, better energy. Excellent change in color pallette for emotional effect. Just watch out those too perfect straight lines for the horizon. Solid page. Another 5 from me. :p
usedbooks at 9:05PM, April 10, 2010
I agree. Love the layout, the expressions, and even just that little bit of bruising color makes a huge difference Also, Lol@Kaida. At least the sunglasses appear normal when she's outside. She'll have to go to NYC sometime and visit Seiko, Yuki, and Fudo (if any of them survived -- very convenient for her to be out of the country... XD )
Tantz Aerine at 12:41PM, April 9, 2010
YES, this works MUCH better. I can feel the icy pool of acid form in poor Rick's stomach. Excellent, and OUCH on the bone showing through!
Hapoppo at 4:16PM, March 31, 2010
Don't worry, I'm sure my update frequency will tell you I'm not exactly a stickler for preparation, either... sometimes you just have to learn how to hit the ground running.
Greyman at 8:02PM, March 30, 2010
Way to bring down the kid's high, but between this and his training, he should begin with a good appreciation for responsible super power use.
that kid yellow at 7:54PM, March 28, 2010
ah i found an update comic frm u awesome...dude i love ur comic web page
patrickdevine at 10:05AM, March 28, 2010
Jeez Rick, now look what you've done! That's a pretty messed-up lookin' dude. If I can make a suggestion for the reboot of this page, if the tears in the field were more clear and obvious I think it might look better. Maybe even make the ground under the astroturf look darker in color. I just think that the torn field ought to be more impressively damaged because Rick comments on it.
Abt_Nihil at 5:28PM, March 27, 2010
Oh, something just occured to me... maybe there's just no point... at all?? :P (Also: Longest comment I've ever written!)
Abt_Nihil at 5:26PM, March 27, 2010
Hey there! ^_^ I just read your first few pages, and you know I'd never read any of your pages before! (Save for those I referenced for the fan-art.) So, a few thoughts: (1) Web site is looking great, and the features are very cool. The map is a neat idea. However, while the header (including the map) is in the center of my screen, the page and comment section are not - they're on the left side. Why is that? Doesn't seem like something that would be hard to fix, eh? (2) As for the actual comic, art and colors look beautiful. You can really see the improvement in your work. But you can also see that you're headed somewhere else - please don't take this comment as meaning that your current art isn't great, it just means your style looks like it's in the middle of evolving. (3) I have absolutely no idea what's going on and what this is going to be about, but I guess that's because there are only 8 pages at this point ^_^ This feels like you've got a lot to set up, and you're introducing different characters for some unknown purpose... gathering your players. With the prologue, you've shown that you've got the patience, motivation and stamina to actually get to where you want to be. I'm looking forward to reading it, so I can get a better feel for your approach at writing comics. I hope you won't mind my sharing a few more thoughts on this point. By doing this I don't mean to imply that I'm in a position to preach about these things - it's just because I think about them a lot. When you're setting up an epic story, and you've got the feeling that your pay-off - the ultimate resolution, the point at which all things come together - is far in the future, how do you approach writing the comic NOW? If all the fun to be had is in the far future, doesn't that mean that the present is just a lot of hard work, with the distant (and, in the world of webcomics, where most are cancelled, or life interferes in some way at some point, uncertain) promise of some validation of this work? So, methings: Set-up has to be pay-off at the same time! Personally, I don't trust that the future will ever come. And while I write comics mainly for the ultimate resolution of the story, I don't trust that this resolution will validate the whole comic. But of course, there's still this tension between setting things up and things paying off. Just... thoughts... :P
jgib99 at 8:50PM, March 25, 2010
Okay. That might be the most horrific sports injury ever. Red Card!
dueeast at 8:11PM, March 25, 2010
Wow, he did a Carolyn (except he was happily psychotic not angry psychotic)! Good page, even for "not finished" version.
Tantz Aerine at 10:13AM, March 25, 2010
It still is a powerful page, just the emotional trip from great satisfaction to undiluted horror and disbelief. Can't wait to see the enhanced version! ;)
Evil Emperor Nick at 8:26AM, March 25, 2010
Huh so I guess being crippled for life is that guys piece of the Devon LEGacy. If you need someone to bounce ideas off of while you flush out the story I'd be happy to help anyway I can.
edbang at 7:17AM, March 25, 2010
Hey wow. I didn't even know this comic had started... This page is not as bad as you think. I like the uniqueness of panel 5, and I also like the ragdoll idea. The page starts out strong with the first 3 panels. I'd rework panel 4 to include some of the body so you can get in hand gestures. Panel 6sub1, I'd ground with the opposing team's net and side lines, but panel 6sub2 and panel 6sub3 are ok. Work a bit on the clouds, and give the grass some texture, and that should fix it up nicely without redrawing it completely. Lots of cool ideas for the comic. I like the map idea. I remember we talked a bit about concurrent plotlines before, and I didn't think it'd work out, but it looks like it has a lot of potential. Good luck!
Peipei at 7:16AM, March 25, 2010
Woah o.O!
DAJB at 12:35AM, March 25, 2010
Hey, getting the comic right is far more important than an arbitrary schedule. Although a frequent update schedule [i]can[/i] help boost pageviews, there's no direct relationship to fan numbers. There are always a few comics at the top of the top lists that update even [i]less[/i] frequently than once a week. Oh, and ouch. My leg hurts just looking at that fourth panel!
usedbooks at 10:22PM, March 24, 2010
Yeah, his whole body looks kinda twisted like someone tossed a toy across the room. It looks more like a boneless rubber leg than an injury. (Or like his sock got pulled partway off.) Also, "in flight" it looks like he spontaneously bent himself. If he was injured by impact, it should have been bent before he flew back. (Btw, I can critique art, I just can't create it. ^_^; Since you're redrawing the page anyway, I thought you'd appreciate input.) Good emotions/expressions on Rick, and I like the dialogue. :)