Blood Zombie Page 11
Panman on July 7, 2008
This is the last page of The Curse of the Blood Zombie. If you have any feedback I'd appreciate it, particularly regarding the ending which I'm not too sure about. I feel like I ended it a bit too abruptly, and it maybe needed another page or so for the narrator to wrap it up. What do you think?
Thanks for reading,
Graham.
blueliath at 7:54PM, July 21, 2008
nice. don't really like horror, but the art caught my interest. actually, it was pretty funny and even a little bit scary. the story did seem a little short, but you were making it a series of horror stories, right? and you could always add another page to make this one seem more final.
cs3ink at 2:32AM, July 9, 2008
IMO, it'a too abrupt for me. Love the art though.
Deraymou at 8:47AM, July 8, 2008
I'm not big on the input thing... uhm... Never been good at it. it DOES seem a bit abrupt. An end narration page would be cool. Also, it's not dead, it just got a mouthful of drugs. It's not dead, it's just tripping balls, amirite? Really good though. I'd love to see more work by you
DAJB at 4:04AM, July 8, 2008
Great stuff. It probably does need something from the narrator just to "book-end" it, especially as two of the main characters died. Also, story-wise, it could use an explanation of "why" that technique worked against the monster. Maybe something about "bad drugs" and a dry aside about how lucky they are that the local dealer is known for mixing baking soda in with his stuff. If you move the "I can't believe that worked" into Panel 5, then the cop could deliver the punchline as they leave the house. Or the narrator could deliver it by way of a voice-over. Fun story, anyway. Thanks for sharing!