| | User: Bekefel | | | | Wow another dead comic, i keep on finding these things today. -Posted on Feb 14, 2007 | | User: Rich | | | | Also cocks. -Posted on Nov 28, 2006 | | User: Rich | | | | Also, the green dude is a tad bit bright for my tastes. You ought to make him a darker shade of green so it doesn't hurt anyone's eyes. -Posted on Nov 28, 2006 | | User: Rich | | | 1. Nobody has conversations with someone from 20 feet away.
2. Apart from Shadow's eyes changing, his pose never changes.
3. The panels are zoomes so far out. It wouldn't hurt to zoom them in a bit. -Posted on Nov 28, 2006 | | User: trickman | | 4 | | The textboxes should be traded in the second panel... to give the idea that Shadow talks first... -Posted on Nov 28, 2006 | | User: Boo_Radley | | | | Err, nevermind. Disregard my last complaint. -Posted on Nov 28, 2006 | | User: Boo_Radley | | | Alright. Good luck with everything. I'm sure you can fix these little issues to have a good sprite comic.
Also, one more little complaint. (I know, there are lots. That's just how I review.) With the positioning of the text boxes, usually the height determines which box is read first. With this one, I find myself reading Shadow's lines when I should be reading what Shine says. Minor problem, but it affects readability. Everything else has been done right. -Posted on Nov 28, 2006 | | User: Boo_Radley | | 3 | Sorry, but...
The Shine character is too bright for my tastes. I get WHY he may be bright, being named "shine" and all, but the bright green and orange don't really look that great. Maybe tone down the brightness a little?
Second, the text boxes are alright, but, well... you don't want the text to contact the actual box. The ends of the text tails are sometimes parallel to the character's head (try making the end point to the actual character). Also, there's a little extra space in the text boxes. Maybe you can cut back on that? Once those problems are fixed, the text boxes will look fine. Simple, but still perfectly fine.
Some sprites look odd (like Shine's sprite in the 1st panel, and Shadow's arm in panels 2, 3, and 4. Any maybe you could pick a sprite that makes it clearer that Shine is running in the 4th panel?
Fix these problems, and you will have a fine looking sprite comic. -Posted on Nov 28, 2006 | | Only registered members may vote. Sign up here!
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