User: TBustah
I like this concept, but it needs some work. First of all, don't use Paint for your text bubbles, they look too pixelated. Get Photoshop or Paint.net. A lot of your grammar, spelling, and punctuation is off as well. As seandmon said, your panels need some work. They need to be more uniform. Try making yourself a template, and use it to make all of your pages. I also thought the way Evan was just silent until he introduced himself was really akward and somewhat confusing, but that's something that you as an author need to figure out how to fix yourself. I'm just here to show you how things are done as far as page graphics and text. Anyway, keep plugging away, this certainly has potential. -Posted on Nov 25, 2008

User: seandmon		5
This is good, but I do have some suggestions. Is panel three really necessary? From where I sit, not really. -Posted on Apr 09, 2007