Chronicaust

TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK ABOUT THE DIALOGUE!
I found an artist! He is working on character design right now. Here is the script and expect to see the actual thing in a few days.

-Posted on Jan 15, 2006

User: rmmanuel 5

Yep, throw in good action words and give everyone an opinion....that's what I was told to do on my stories :)
-Posted on Feb 15, 2008

User: Darkmax 5

-Posted on Nov 02, 2006

User: Emotional

I think your on to somthing, I'm adding you to favorites.
-Posted on Jan 20, 2006

User: Green_Tangerine

Maybe try to jazz up the vocabulary a bit, it sort of feels like it's been dumbed down for the reader. For example, I'd lose the 'borrow' part... Go with acquire instead, or something to that effect. But don't worry too much, your script gets the point across, and everyone improves over time.
Hope your new artist works out, I'll check back when you've got some images up!
-Posted on Jan 16, 2006

User: Chronicaust

I need criticism, please tell me what is good/bad. Do I need improvement? I thank anyone who helps me out here.
-Posted on Jan 16, 2006

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