| | User: Vaati | | 5 | I'd suggest a different font, black panel outlines instead of white, and punctuation. It's really not bad, just could use a couple of aesthetic changes.
I'll fave this, just cause you have potential to be great, and I wanna see where it takes you. -Posted on Nov 14, 2006 | | User: Wolfcape | | | | Mmm. Yes, I felt a little discouraged, but looking at this the text is horrible. For some reason paint shop pro doesn't do well with speech bubbled -_- -Posted on Nov 11, 2006 | | User: Darkmax | | 5 | -Posted on Nov 06, 2006 | | User: Mika_yi | | 5 | O.O you know I have no idea how to make or even how to produce sprites, so I got nothing on advice. cept if you like doing them it is a comic after all so go ahead and make them. it can only help in the long run right?
I love the bg on here. and the frame by frame made me laugh cause the poor guy went flying. ouch has to hurt. -Posted on Aug 26, 2006 | | User: Joff | | 4 | I think this page could work on it's own if I'd gotten a chance to see the one before it... This seems to be the second half of a two-parter at least.. So I'm not really sure what's going on there..
The speech bubbles themselves are a good size and are clearly defined. However, if the speech inside them is white in any way, even with a black outline as this seems to be, it'd be better to go with a darker fill on the speech bubbles.. Or just make the text black. It'd make it easier to read.
Never had the urge to make a sprite comic, so I can't say for certain, but I know they take time and effort. Which is something I can respect. Just keep at it, bearing in mind that you need to get the point across clearly and you'll have a pretty good strip on your hands here -Posted on Aug 14, 2006 | | User: ZoeStead | | 5 | | Just popped by, don't give up, just listen to the advise. I don't do sprit comics, but I've seen a lot worse than this, so keep at it! -Posted on Aug 02, 2006 | | User: Wolfcape | | | Okay, thanks Mimarin and Dark... first off- the mix of characters is the part of the story plot :P... I also don't know how to make decent speech bubbles :( and I had NO IDEA my punctuation was horrible. I thought it was good... and that's about it >_>
Thanks Darklor for encouraging me a little bit, and i think Mimarin should have tried to help me improve and give some hints rather than scream "Stop making comics" >_> -Posted on Jul 13, 2006 | | User: Doklor567 | | | | oh and dont listen to mimarin about him telling you to stop making sprite comics, he just has a grudge against everyone that makes sprite comics. With a little work this could be really good. Keep trying. -Posted on Jul 11, 2006 | | User: Doklor567 | | 3 | | Its ok but here are some tips. you should make the persons mouth move, and make him show emotions. when he fell to the ground his emotion looked exactly the same like nothing happened. Also fix you speech bubbles. I'm gonna keep my eye on this comic and see how you do in the future. -Posted on Jul 11, 2006 | | User: Mimarin | | 2 | Oh yikes, this is bad even by the standard sprite comics normally go by, this breaks every law of webcomics, you have big, white, badly sized text boxes, horrible punctuation and mixed universe sprites and that isnt mentioning the emotes in sentances, that just isnt right.
My advice is to STOP MAKING SPRITE COMICS and come up with something better.
but you are new so i will give ye a 2 as opposed to a one. -Posted on Jul 11, 2006 | | Only registered members may vote. Sign up here!
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