Now, here's a massive reordering of chapter one. After this point, it continues as it does in chapter two, and at the end of that scene, chapter one ends. Better? Worse? Critiques on layout? Writing? Go ahead.

Yes, my pencils really are that bad, yeah, I noticed the spelling error... no, I'm not making the pencils better, most of what I do is digital and the pencilling really just serves as something for me to jump off of. :) This is the stuff most of the time no one would ever see, but it works to display how I want to reorder it.