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| patrickdevine | | I'm not sure if I like the narration or not. Personally I hate having exposition but sometimes it's the best way to move the story at a reasonable pace. Of course I always think that my first pages are my worst ones. -Posted on Oct 29, 2008 |
| | User: Warpedwenger | | 5 | | It works I don't have any problem with it. -Posted on Oct 29, 2008 | | User: amanda | | 5 | | I like the narration ^.^ It's useful and, in this case, completely non-invasive. I like how you drew the house - you did a great job of making it look empty and sort of sad. -Posted on Oct 29, 2008 |
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